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Tourniquette
Joined: 11 Jan 2004
Reviews: 23
Location: USA
Thu May 19, 2005 10:44 pm

Excellent writing. It's almost a bit *too* much like Tolkien for my taste--not enough dialogue and lengthy descriptions. Still, I very much enjoyed the plot line--I'll check back when the update thingie sends me an email. Very Happy smiley face
 
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AngmarAndElfhild
Joined: 18 May 2005
Reviews: 80
Location: All of Arda
Fri May 20, 2005 3:33 am

Tourniquette said
> Excellent writing. It's almost a bit *too* much like Tolkien for my taste--not enough dialogue and lengthy descriptions. Still, I very much enjoyed the plot line--I'll check back when the update thingie sends me an email. Very Happy smiley face

Tourniquette, thank you very much for your comments. I admit I had a bit of "stage fright" about adding this story but your words made me feel much better. Elfhild is pleased, too, and she wrote this to me after reading your review: "Too much like Tolkien? I take that as a high honor and the greatest of compliments. Thank you very much!"
-Angmar and Elfhild (faandrūk)
 
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SpaceWeavil

Joined: 27 May 2004
Reviews: 365
Location: Looking at shiny things
Fri May 20, 2005 9:55 am

Since I'm working on a slightly mammoth Witch King story myself at present, I had to have a look at this, and so far I have to say I am really impressed. Your description isn't overbearing or too weighty and yet still provides such an atmosphere. Also I'm very impressed by the amount of research - the Old English alone gave Rohan a real flavour as I was reading. I'm not usually very keen on AU stories, but this one has me interested since it is so well written, and I'm very keen now to see where the story goes.

Welcome to the site and thank you for posting Very Happy smiley face

SpaceWeavil (certified Nazgul lover)
 
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AngmarAndElfhild
Joined: 18 May 2005
Reviews: 80
Location: All of Arda
Sat May 21, 2005 4:32 pm

SpaceWeavil said
> Since I'm working on a slightly mammoth Witch King story myself at present, I had to have a look at this, and so far I have to say I am really impressed. Your description isn't overbearing or too weighty and yet still provides such an atmosphere. Also I'm very impressed by the amount of research - the Old English alone gave Rohan a real flavour as I was reading. I'm not usually very keen on AU stories, but this one has me interested since it is so well written, and I'm very keen now to see where the story goes.
>
> Welcome to the site and thank you for posting Very Happy smiley face
>
> SpaceWeavil (certified Nazgul lover)

SpaceWeavil, we are glad that you are enjoying the story. We are interested in the one that you are writing. We have found that it takes a tremendous amount of research even before typing up the first page. There are so many Nazgūl quotes in my notes that the file became so ponderously large that I decided to put the information on one of my own sites for others to read: http://www.geocities.com/thequietwraith/nazgulquotes.html Feel free to use any of the information.

Elfhild is neither a linguist nor an expert in Old English, but she has a very keen interest in the subject, while my interest lies in Black Speech. The trouble with this is that there are so few canon words. For this reason, others have used the elements of etymology to derive something that seems reasonable. Black Speech is simple to learn and you can make small conversations, but nothing really deep. I have been trying to phrase a letter that might be sent to a foreign dignitary, but I have not been able to find enough words even to sound semi-literate and thus must rely on Common.

Thank you again for your encouragement.

Angmar and Elfhild
 

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Tourniquette
Joined: 11 Jan 2004
Reviews: 23
Location: USA
Mon May 23, 2005 10:57 pm

As dark as it was, I simply adored this latest chapter. This time, I felt the descriptions completely pull me in, and I could almost taste the haze of burning straw in my mouth. Poor girls. Now I'm dying of suspense!
 
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AngmarAndElfhild
Joined: 18 May 2005
Reviews: 80
Location: All of Arda
Tue May 24, 2005 3:22 am

Tourniquette said
> As dark as it was, I simply adored this latest chapter. This time, I felt the descriptions completely pull me in, and I could almost taste the haze of burning straw in my mouth. Poor girls. Now I'm dying of suspense!

Tourniquette,

Elfhild wrote and told me she was beaming when she saw your comments and thanks you very much. True, this is a dark story, but dark and light mix together into shades of gray. It will not be smooth sailing ahead for Elfhild and Elffled until.... "...you may find friends upon your way when you least look for it." (Elrond, "The Ring Goes South," FOTR).
 
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Tourniquette
Joined: 11 Jan 2004
Reviews: 23
Location: USA
Thu May 26, 2005 10:18 pm

Great use of Old English! I studied it a few years back in college, so I could understand what they said. I like the comment about about Dwarves smithying in Elffled's brain. XD I'm suitably depressed now. Thanks a lot. Wink smiley face
 
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AngmarAndElfhild
Joined: 18 May 2005
Reviews: 80
Location: All of Arda
Fri May 27, 2005 8:48 pm

Tourniquette said
> Great use of Old English! I studied it a few years back in college, so I could understand what they said. I like the comment about about Dwarves smithying in Elffled's brain. XD I'm suitably depressed now. Thanks a lot. Wink smiley face

Tourniquette,

We must do something to make you happier then. Perhaps the addition of more Old English will remedy the sadness? Smile smiley face

Elfhild wrote and asked me to pass this on, "Thank you for the comment about Old English. I am new to the language and was concerned that my translations would be faulty. Life for the twins still won't even out for quite some time (and chapters) to come. This will be a very long story, and I hope you stay tuned for further updates."
 
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Aganuzir

Joined: 31 May 2005
Reviews: 94
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Tue May 31, 2005 11:11 am

I am enchanted by your story. It is so beautifully written and so well researched.

I am your old fan, I have read all the Second Darcness stories (do you really NEED to close the project?) and now I am reading the Circles. I know there will be more wonders to read.

And your story compelled me to register! I don't know why, but I hate registering, I am a lurker by nature. But I am also a HUGE Witch-King fan. I have almost registered when I read the magnificent Khazar-Khum's fic, and was on the brink of it again as I read Space Weavil's fics, but yours made me do it!
Please continue!

Regards and warmest wishes,

Aganuzir
 
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AngmarAndElfhild
Joined: 18 May 2005
Reviews: 80
Location: All of Arda
Wed Jun 01, 2005 3:41 am

Aganuzir said
> I am enchanted by your story. It is so beautifully written and so well researched.
>I am your old fan, I have read all the Second Darcness stories (do you really NEED to close the project?) and now I am reading the Circles. I know there will be more wonders to read.

We are very glad that you came out of "lurkerdom" to comment on both Second Darkness and The Circles. We thank you most sincerely and appreciate your comments. It is fans like you that make us want to continue. In the past, some people have disliked our stories and portrayals of the Nazgūl, but good words are like a soothing balm to wounded pelts.

Second Darkness does not HAVE to close but we are currently putting the majority of our time and effort into The Circles. SD is live action roleplay and is therefore much freer than a novel-length story. Don't worry, however, SD will continue but at a slower pace.

Thank you again and thanks for your continuing loyalty to SD. Last I talked to Elfhild, she was doing somersaults. Below will be her comments.

Angmar

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Wow! A Second Darkness fan! I am so thrilled. The story of Elfhild and Elffled will mimic those old plotlines of SD but the story will be much different this time around with a greater level of depth and maturity. Certain small details have changed, such as the ages of the twins (originally they were 20 not 16), for more time will elapse between key events in The Circles than it did in Second Darkness.

So... being a fan of SD, you probably have a good idea of some of the things that will happen in the future, but shhh!! don't tell anyone... no spoilers. Smile smiley face

Thank you so much for the good words. Smile smiley face

Elfhild
 
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