Reviews by Daeuial

Okay, NOW Panic! · Sun Apr 25, 2004 12:08 am

The best thing about this story and its predecessor, "Don't Panic" is the realism. There is so little tangible 'author influence' that the story seems to have been written by a fly on the walls within Imladris. There is no ulterior motive causing elves to behave out of character or a dark lord suddenly becoming less powerful. The plot continuum remains intact, and the story is all the more entertaining for it. The original character is like your best friend, a bit ditzy when you first meet her, but more sensible with time and experience. You begin to understand her actions and sympathize with her emotions.

You almost forget that she isn't real.

This is a very good story.

And I can't wait for the next chapter.

Undómiel · Sat Apr 24, 2004 2:59 am

I don't agree with the premise of this story, because Arwen seems to have been described as 'fading' from her grief at losing Aragorn after his death, and laying down to die alone in Lothlorien. I don't think a mortal can die from grief in Tolkien's world, so she must have still been counted as one of the Firstborn--but she simply could not go to Valinor, because the last ships had left years earlier. However, I can stil see the beauty in your story, and I enjoyed it very much. Were you perhaps using Elros as a prior example of a Peredhil's changes after making the choice to become mortal?

Suil Vain (Fair Winds) · Sat Apr 24, 2004 1:14 am

Surprisingly good for a crossover. All events are probable in the circumstances, and all in all I was quite satisfied by the end of chapter 13. No nitpicks, amazingly. This story is well researched and you haven't even broken canon [not including the obvious]. I'm thrilled that you are not spoiling a great premise by rushing into things. You give your plot time to develop. Very nice. I'll be watching for updates.

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