Reviews by SpaceWeavil

Purity · Sat Mar 12, 2005 3:18 pm

Just read from chapter 2 onwards. Nice to see you update regularly (unlike me...me bad Twisted Evil smiley face

). I like your writing style, it's nice and concise, without being overly simplistic. One personal thing, which is probably just pure opinion on my part so feel free to take no notice, is that I'd like to see more scenes that don't include stuff from the movies. I like the way you've woven your character into all the action and the way you're going 'behind the lines' as it were and explaining out some of what was said, but just having read your recent chapters, I'd like to see some other scenes as well, if that makes sense, like your OFC going off by herself and doing something while the rest of it is going on. You're probably going to do this anyway, I would expect, if this is a Legomance.

Purity · Thu Mar 10, 2005 8:51 pm

I must admit, I find author's notes like that a little off putting as a reader, but in a way it is a shame that people feel they need to be so defensive. As your other reviewers have said, there ought to be no need for that on this archive. Most people here try to leave as helpful and encouraging a review as possible, and as Viv says, there are always the admins to turn to in the unlikely event that you do get a flame. To be honest, I'd say all you need to put on your note is that it's movieverse and a legomance. That way, as you've said, those who don't find that thing appealing don't have to read.

Now, that said, onto your first proper chapter. I like the way you've incorporated your own character into the established action of the film, without it intruding or taking over, if you get me. That was what struck me right away. Your writing, moreover, was easy to read and enjoyable. I'm interested to see where you go with this story.

Also just to add, welcome to the site and I hope you find posting here an enjoyable experience.

Rebirth · Tue Mar 08, 2005 12:53 pm

Chapter 2 is lovely yet again. The writing's wonderful and I love the way you're exploring the idea. Really looking forward to reading more. Very Happy smiley face

The Bitter Sweet Vintages of Time · Sun Mar 06, 2005 8:08 am

I don't normally read other people's Elrond stories, (just because I'm picky that way Wink smiley face

) but since I'd read a couple of your other stories I thought I'd read this. I must say out of the three I've read, this is the best so far. I like the original ideas in this; the way the different vintages remind Elrond of the stages in his life. It's a novel approach, and very touching. Particularly the line about dust in the cellar. Well done.

Leaving and Staying · Sun Mar 06, 2005 8:04 am

Like your other story I just read, this was a nice little scene. I'd love to see you expand on some of these in fact. You touch on a lot of emotions in these scenes, and you obviously have a good understanding of these characters. In both your stories I've read so far I've been impressed by your portrayal of Galadriel and Celeborn, in that you haven't made them a cold, aloof couple, which I've found a lot of in fan fiction.

Safe In Ada's Arms · Sun Mar 06, 2005 8:01 am

Nice little scene, with some nice emotions towards the end when Galadriel steps in. Very Happy smiley face

Dutiful Galion · Sat Mar 05, 2005 10:27 am

If I'm understanding this correctly, you needed to incorporate all the things in your list into this fic for the challenge, right? If that's correct, then I would have to congratulate you on managing that, as I'd've been stumped with the 'socks' thing. The smut part also was quite good. Personally though, I thought it was a little too modern, language-wise. I mean, that might have been what you wanted to achieve, if this was to be a humour piece maybe, but I just couldn't really see Eowyn using the phrase 'stick up his ass'. Laughing smiley face

I do like the idea of exploring this 'relationship' between Gallion and Legolas, and it might be interesting to see more about their life, and how Gallion had to put up with the Prince etc, even if it wasn't entirely smut related and more Tolkienish. Very Happy smiley face

Flower of the Horselords · Thu Mar 03, 2005 8:23 pm

Just read chapters 5 and 6. I must say I love some of the description, for instance Eowyn's considering Haldir's hands, and realising that they should not have been made for war. I'm enjoying the developing relationship between Haldir and Eowyn, and I loved the description of her in her armour. Again, I like that the story is very canon-considerate, which considering it is an AU is a rare treat. All your twists and manipulations are obviously very well thought out, and I'm enjoying reading a romance story involving elves that does take LACE into account (am I coming across as a canonista or whatever the word is here, or just someone very, very sad? Laughing smiley face

). Regardless of my ramblings there, the story's progressing really well, and for a first attempt at Fan Fic, it is stunning, Eruanna. Brava. Very Happy smiley face

Linden and Laurel · Wed Mar 02, 2005 4:34 pm

This story was wonderful. The prose is excellent and very Hobbit-like, and as your other reviewers have said, Sam's voice just rings throughout. Very Happy smiley face

Flower of the Horselords · Tue Mar 01, 2005 4:37 pm

I'm so glad that you posted this here at last. It has been well worth waiting for. The language is extremely pleasant to read (I always seem to start with language in these reviews, but I am a sucker for a bit of well-turned-out, artistic prose Wink smiley face

). I know you've said that this strays from canon a bit, but one thing I am very impressed with is that you have put so much thought into your 'deviations' if you want to call it that. You've obviously put an awful lot of work into this fic, and that makes it enjoyable to read, IMO. I honestly had never thought of Haldir 'surviving' his injuries in the films, but your reasoning makes perfect sense, given the details in things like LACE about elves being able to survive injuries that would have killed mortals.

All in all, an enjoyable read, and not a pairing I have seen before, so it is refreshingly different for me as well.

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