Reviews by LothirielofRohan

Trust To Hope · Sun Jul 11, 2004 7:27 pm

Suilad Nove,

I love this chapter! Eomer and Lothiriel say all the words anyone would ever want to hear or read for two people who have fallen in love, separated and now have been reunited. If I could only find a man as romantic, dashing, courageous as Eomer... Very Happy smiley face

Lothiriel of Rohan

Trust To Hope · Sun Jul 11, 2004 6:48 pm

Suilad Nove,

Re-read chapter 17. I love the build up to the moment Lothiriel and Eomer finally meet in Minas Tirith after their long separation....it is so perfect! I can hear the drum roll in my head as each word, line and phrase in the chapter outlines the anticipation of this moment. Wow! Very Happy smiley face

From the beginning of the chapter when Eomer finds Olorin, Anhuil's horse, in the stable, the confrontation between Madril and Eomer in the barn, the scene where Eowyn picks out Eomer's clothes and helps him with his hair and beard, the banter of Gimli, the vision of the other guests in the room including Mithrandir with the hobbits to the slow walk to the end of the room and Eomer and Lothiriel are introduced their eyes meeting........gosh my heart is pounding with anticipation...so perfect!!

Love it!!!

Lothiriel of Rohan

Trust To Hope · Sun Jul 11, 2004 6:03 pm

Suilad Nove,

Re-read chapter 16 and I must admit I rather skimmed it only because I cannot wait til Eomer and Lothiriel meet each other again after their separation...it is so perfect. Enjoyed the section with Amrothos and Cam as they develop their relationship.

I did notice something that appeared out of sorts. You ended Chapter 14 on the 15th of June with Imrahil returning to Dol Amroth and announcing they were all going to Minas Tirith for Arwen and Aragorn's wedding. But then in chapter 16 you started that on February 30th with Lothiriel and Cam packing to go to Minas Tirith for the wedding. Seems like they are going back in time....unless I read that wrong.. Smile smiley face

Lothiriel of Rohan

Trust To Hope · Sun Jul 11, 2004 5:20 pm

Suilad Nove,

Re-read chapter 15. Your description of the destruction of the Black Gate, the Towers of Teath and Mordor sent chills down my spine as I remembered the scenes from the movie, The Return of the King. This was so beautifully done!

I could not help but wonder what soldiers of Rohan survived the Battle of Pelennor Fields and the march on the Black Gate. It would have been great in this chapter to mention them...Eothain, Haleth and the others...particularly when they sang Ani's dragon song in celebration. Great place in the chapter to bring them up... Smile smiley face

In some ways Eomer appears to be quite somber and burdened with his responsibilities most of the time. It was great to see him laughing as the men sang Ani's song.

Eomer's realization that Eowyn is in love and deserves her happiness is very mature. In many stories I have read of Eomer's over-protectiveness of his sister but you do not mention that. Your description of their relationship is one of respect and recognition of individuality which is great to read. Eomer's conversation with Eowyn shows how close these siblings are...that they share so much and know each other so well...very good!

As always....great chapter!

Lothiriel of Rohan

Trust To Hope · Sun Jul 11, 2004 4:31 pm

Suilad Nove,

Re-read chapter 14. What a great cliff hanger to end this chapter....the anticipated wedding of the King Elessar and Arwen...naturally Eomer will be there...ah...the suspense! Love it!

I was wondering what happened to Elenion...glad he made it back to Dol Amroth. Love that wolf!

This chapter is a great set up for the relationship between Amrothos and Cam. Particularly when you write that he anticipated joy of her company.

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Throughout your story you put in these great plot devices. For example, when Cam tells Anhuil that "propriety is over rated", Ani find Madril in her father's study and Amrothos says to Ani "If there is a way to get you out of this I will". These are all hints of things to come later in the book and many readers would not necessarily remember these events. But I have learned to try and remember these scenes and/or words because you weave them in later in your story in a brilliant way I might add. Smile smiley face

This part of your chapter was particularly good: "Anhuil whirled around and released her dagger. It spun through the air, efficiently nailing the log where he sat, right between Fenwick’s legs. He looked up in shock. She casually strode over and leaned over him, grabbing the dagger with her fist. “I have told you before, you will not tell me what I can and cannot do. If you think your threats and brute force are going to be methods of controlling me, know this. I far surpass you in skill with any weapon, including intellect. So do not try me, Mardil. Next time I may aim higher.” She jerked the dagger from the log and turned her back to him, stomping through the deep sand back to Cam, who was red faced with laughter". Go Lothiriel!

Gosh...don't you love to hate Madril? The little weasel. Twisted Evil smiley face

Lothiriel of Rohan

Trust To Hope · Sun Jul 11, 2004 3:17 pm

Suilad Nove,

Hannon le for your e-mails and messages. I will respond to them later. I am glad you are enjoying my reviews. Very Happy smiley face

I enjoy writing them but not as much as I love reading your story...

Re-read chapter 13. Lothiriel's conversation with her brother and insistence of finding out what is going on reminds me of Imrahil's observation/thought in the previous chapter...that Lothiriel is so much like her mother and would not be dissuaded from her thought and inquiries once she made her mind up. Both mother and daughter are proud and intelligent and will not be put aside or ignored.

The affection and love between Lothiriel and Amrothos is clear and I must admit I had tears in my eyes as they talked about Frodo traveling to Mordor to destroy the ring. It is these lines that reminds one of the courage and sacrifice of Frodo and Sam to destroy the ring in the face of the evil of Sauron and over ten thousand orcs. What odds for two little hobbits to surreptiously pass through Golgorath (sp?) to cast the ring in the fires of Mount Doom. Two little hobbits so far away from home. This does take away from the courage and sacrifice of men, elves, and all free people to fight Sauron for they have laid down their lives for the future of their people and ME. (Where is that handkerchief?...)

In your story Amrothos told Lothiriel the Dunedain were joining the soldiers of Gondor and Rohan in their march on the Black Gate. I did not know any of the Dunedain were left or present at the time of the siege of Minas Tirth but upon re-reading the Return of the King in chapter 4, "The Field of Cormallen", it does appear the Dunedain were there. Guess PJ did no mention them in the movie for fear of introducing yet another group into the story line...or at least I don't recall that they were mentioned in the movie at this point.

How observant a brother, Amrothos, is to notice his sister is in love. Amusing and touching dialog between him and Lothiriel in this chapter.

Your description of seeing Dol Amroth again...so vivid. I love the eagles in Tolkein's books but I did not know Landroval, Gwathir's brother, was able to communicate with the people of ME that Sauron had been defeated. I should go back and re-read that part of the book. Another great vision in the mind's eye. I guess Dol Amroth is too far away for Lothiriel and Amrothos to feel the collapse of Mount Doom? I should look at a map...

Loved the joyous meeting of the Admiral and Cam and Cam and Lothiriel. You set up the loving relationshp of the Admiral and Cam so well. Cam's friendship with Lothiriel runs true. I enjoy Cam as a character and friend of Lothiriel. I remember the exploits of these women together in the chapters to come. It will be wonderful to see how you explore their friendship in book 2. Nan ablu.

Great chapter!

Lothiriel of Rohan
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Trust To Hope · Sun Jul 11, 2004 12:33 pm

Suilad Nove,

Re-read chapter 12. I really enjoyed reading how Lothiriel has found she has a gift for healing the spirits of people as the soldiers lay dying and everyone else has moved on to the patients who have a chance to live. It shows real growth in her as a person. Not only is she a warrior but a healer. I hope her friendship with the young Rohirric woman she met in the Houses of Healing, Eolinde, will continue in book 2 as Lothiriel will need these relationships to help her understand and be accepted by the Rohirrim after she marries Eomer and becomes queen of Rohan. These women are close in age and have shared harrowing experiences tending to the wounded and dying in the Houses of Healing at the time of the Battle of Pelennor Fields and the siege of Minas Tirith. The way you have personalized their first meeting brings these two into focus and you can't help but wonder how their friendship will develop later.

Your use of the Rohirric and Sindarin songs and language throughout your story brings an authencity and realism to the entire story and makes the reader believe they have truly entered the world of Middle Earth at this point in time. I admire your standard of excellence in the research you and Riya have done to bring Middle Earth to life. I have read other fan fiction where it was obvious the writer had not bothered to research her material before writing a story based on Tolkein's characters. It showed in her work and I am having a hard time continuing to read her story.

Wonderful chapter! By the way, what does "glassen" mean in Sindarin? Also, excuse me for my ignorance but did all the people in Gondor speak Sindarin elvish? Nan ablu. (Until later)

Lothiriel of Rohan

Trust To Hope · Sat Jul 10, 2004 5:50 pm

Suilad Nove,

As I re-read chapter 11 I wondered why you did not have Lothiriel looking out of the window from the Houses of Healing at the Battle of Pelennor Fields? There are wonderful lines from the Return of the King in the book and the movie which you could have easily incorporated into your story. For example, the dialog between Eowyn and the Witch King when he says "Do not come between the Nazgul and his prey" and she responds "I will kill you if you touch him." At some point in their struggle he tells her "No man can kill me" and she then responds by talking off her helmet and saying "I am no man" and kills him. This is such a dramatic point in the movie and the book even though it was not seen by Eomer because he is in another part of the field, it could have seen and narrated by any of the other Rohirrim such as Eothain or Haleth.

As Theoden is lying on the field and is dying there is a great part in the book where he announces to the soldiers around him as beside him:

"Hail King of the Mark!" ...Ride now to victory! Then he dies.

In the book Eomer then says:

"Mourn not overmuch! Mighty was the fallen, meet with his ending. When
his mound is raised. Women shall weep. War now calls us"

At this point he sees Eowyn and loses it. Tolkein writes:

"He stood a moment as a man who is pierced in the midst of a cry by an arrow through the heart;
and then his face went deathly white; and a cold fury rose in him, so that all speech failed him for a
while. A fey mood took him.
"Eowyn, Eowyn!" he cried at last: "Eowyn, how come you here? What madness or devilry is this? Death,
death, death! Death take us all!"

Then without taking counsel or waiting for the approach of the men of the City, he spurred headlong
back to the front of the great host, and blew a horn, and cried aloud for the onset. Over the field rang his clear
voice calling: "Death! Ride, ride to ruin and the world's ending!"
The Return of the King: "The Battle of the Pelennor Fields," 119

There are some great lines here. In the movie the statement "Death! Ride, ride to ruin and the world's ending!" appears to have been stated by Theoden...at least in the trailer that is. I can't remember if Theoden is the one who says that at the time he leads the charge of the Rohirrim but in the book Eomer says it.

These moments in the battle would have greatly heightened the excitement of the chapter IMHO. To have them in your story with Tolkein's dialog would have been a great read.

Still you know I love your story....Just a suggestion... Smile smiley face

Lothiriel of Rohan

Trust To Hope · Sat Jul 10, 2004 1:30 am

P.S. to review of chapter 10....Legolas is the Prince of Mirkwood as opposed to the Prince of the woodland realm of Greenwood. No? Yes?

Trust To Hope · Fri Jul 09, 2004 9:25 pm

Re-read chapter 10. It was wonderful to see all of our friends back from Lord of the Rings...Legolas, Gimli, Theoden, Eowyn, Faramir, Pippin, Denethor and Gandalf/Mithrandir. I particularly enjoyed the continued teasing and banter of Gimli and Legolas...they are so much fun to watch in the movies and read in your story.

Your dialog for our friends is so in character...I can envision them saying exactly what you have in your story. Then of course Eomer's statement "Oaths you have taken. Fulfill them all! To Lord! To land" (paraphrase)...right out the movie...so very brilliant.

So now Eomer knows he is Theoden's heir. Wonder if Gandalf knew Theoden would die at Pelennor Fields before they went there? Elrond is not the only one who appears to have the gift of foresight!

Ah Ani...a true change in your demeanor now that you are back to being a princess...what a shock to Haleth!

Love this story.....

Lothriel of Rohan

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