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StoryReview
Playing Field (NC-17)
by dragonlady7.
Chapters [8]
Reviews [26]
Warnings [Smut. Language. Dirty.]
Tue Feb 08, 2005 3:08 pm
This was very well-done! Thank you for excellent mechanics, a believable premise, nicely-rounded plot, and snappy dialogue. I love the idea of the practiced courtier falling for the ingenuous innocent, and you did a beautiful job of rendering this realistically and sympathetically.

The only negative of the story was that there were often long, unbroken stretches of dialogue with no hint of blocking or setting-- we get little sense of how the characters interact with their surroundings, or what they're doing with their bodies as they converse. We also have no idea of what Lothiriel looks like (or else the clues were so subtle that I missed them completely, and I was looking hard for them) and I was confused about what she was wearing to ride with Eomer, as you only mentioned it was not like the full skirts she normally wore. A little description goes a long way.

Other than that, brava! A lovely story I'll be recommending to my fellow Tolkien-philes. Thank you again.