Reviews for "All for the Ones I Love"

Fri Jun 18, 2004 8:16 am

Sweetie, you said you hadn't gotten any reviews for this and now I see why. You make notes at the top and bottom of the last two parts saying you're getting reviews. Maybe you are in another forum, but saying so in THIS one is one reason why you're not here. People read that and think, "Oh, since I don't really have time anyway, I won't leave a review since she's already getting some." Or something similar. So I'm suggesting you edit out that commentary when you post the fic here, okay?

Honestly it irks me no end when peopel read but don't leave feedback. That's rude in my opinion, but lots do just that and there's nothing we can do to break them of the habit. If they wrote stories they'd know how it felt to be ignored. Not nice!

Well, on with my impression of the story. Yes, definitely lots of angst in this AU fic of yours and you're doing it well, as far as I can see. Good job! Legolas being so frank isn't going to make anyone happy with him shortly. I hope he can soften his recriminations a tad so that he doesn't alienate the twins, who seem to be good friends of his too. They all need to comfort one another when Aragorn dies. It looks like you're letting him die here anyway. *sniffle* Too sad! Please write more? *vbg*

Advice offered: Get a beta to help you proofread these fics. They're too good to be riddled with misspellings and wrong words used, even if it IS still easy to tell what you meant. Smile smiley face

Thu Jun 24, 2004 12:31 am

I think that was better, yes. *g* Good job!

I liked this little flashback, nice family stuff with the gaiety and the motherly worry and then Elrond's mock stern father figure lecture. Very nice. More soon? *hopeful look*

Tue Jun 29, 2004 5:15 am

Very angsty and sad. I feel sorry for the twins not taking back their harsh words before now. Elves sometimes forget that man, even a Dunadan like Aragorn, see the passage of time far differently than they and what seems like no time to an Elf is a century to a human. *sigh* (Incidentally, a feral plot bunny attacked me with a story idea that last week utilizes just that premise and now I'm working on yet ANOTHER story, which won't get posted till it's done, like the rest of them. lol)

WEll I'm looking forward to the next chapter and hope you can get it out soon. I am really hoping for a miracle here, because if there isn't one, the future of Middle Earth is looking mightly bleak! Sad smiley face

Wed Jun 30, 2004 5:18 am

LOL This is cute! You had the twins pull a Cerano (sp?) number and now Aragorn wants Legolas to help him do the same thing! LOL Only problem is, being an Elf, Arwen will hear Legolas tell him what to say. They'd better come up with another plan, one where he memorizes certain phrases to say to certain things she might say to him. *vbg*

I liked this chapter, thought your dialogue was fine, but it was a tad confusing with the flashbacks plural. I was able to get the gist of what you're trying to convey, I think. Smile smiley face

Sat Jul 03, 2004 5:49 am

Honey, school should always, ALWAYS come first, so don't make excuses about that. {{{hugs}}}

I enjoyed this part, though you really should have let Arwen hear and be amused by Legolas' helping Aragorn and Legolas should have heard Arwen's reply. Perhaps you could show that later, but you don't have to. *g* This was adorably cute, all the same.

Um, how did the messenger know about Estel and Arwen? Was more time supposed to have passed at that point? That wasn't clear.

As I said, I liked this part a lot and look forward to more, as long as it doesn't interfere with your school work. Okay? *vbg* Take care,

April

Thu Jul 08, 2004 12:06 pm

Ack!!! This is AWFUL! Terrible of them to do that to Aragorn! *whimper* Well, we know how well THAT turns out, don't we? *sigh*

Mon Jul 26, 2004 7:44 pm

I love this story! It's wonderful. I can't wait until the next chapter. Wave smiley face

Wed Jul 28, 2004 5:57 am

The spelling and puctuation mistakes in the first chapter are bad but not so off putting - it was the modern speech that made me stop reading!

"his baby boy" just sounds so...wrong?

I know this is an AU but that doesnt mean you have to completely change characters and make elves into men. This fic needs a beta reader desperately. You can ask for one in the forum and you'll get tons of offers.

Tue Aug 03, 2004 11:03 am

I'm sooooo glad you saved him with that move by Illuvatar! *huge sigh of relief as I fall across my desk* Sheesh you had me worried there for a bit!

Mean/sneaky of you to post that preview like that. LOL Looking forward to reading it at some point, hopefully soon. Smile smiley face

Sorry I've been absent, family members going into the hospital right and left is a major distraction, don't you agree? *tired and worried sigh*

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