Reviews for "Payback is Hell"

Wed Jul 02, 2003 9:06 pm

This was a lot of fun. I have to admit I haven't been able to get into the Empty Vessel... first several chapters are just a little confusing. But these characters are just so amusing... I may have to go back and try again.

If I had to offer a constructive criticism, it'd be more in the way of a personal preference: song fics rarely work. Sometimes inserting lyrics works, but most times folks just skip over them, and the rhythm of the story is interrupted whilst they skip. I think the kinky sex here would be just fine without the song lyrics.

But all in all: real nice. Thanks for providing smut inspiration for the evening. And can I borrow Rumil? I have a thing or two for him to sketch Wink smiley face

Thu Jul 03, 2003 8:56 am

I love these two - they are so damn funny together, so well matched. While I normally agree w/what Viv is saying about the lyrics, if y've been reading Empty Vessel (which I check every day for a new chap!) they are a crucial part of who she is. Her music also represents something she is sharing with him from her life, and I his love/hate relationship with it is great! He's starting to recognize certain themes, yet her battle-music drives him to his knees. Sorry, to go off on this music tangent, but I think the choices are so great - Bang a Gong, Moldau, Serenade for Strings - really interesting. Keep up the great work!
I like ANYTHING you do with these characters - she is wonderful!

Fri Jul 04, 2003 10:16 pm

Viv said
> This was a lot of fun. I have to admit I haven't been able to get into the Empty Vessel... first several chapters are just a little confusing. But these characters are just so amusing... I may have to go back and try again.

Please try again. The first couple of chapters confused me and I WROTE the thing! The whole issue of who and what she is is eventually explained in VIVD and excrutiating detail!

> If I had to offer a constructive criticism, it'd be more in the way of a personal preference: song fics rarely work. Sometimes inserting lyrics works, but most times folks just skip over them, and the rhythm of the story is interrupted whilst they skip. I think the kinky sex here would be just fine without the song lyrics.

This is not a song fic. The music mentioned - is heard. She creates it and uses it in many forms for various things. Again, this is explained as you go. And as Garotin said - this is her, sharing her world, her time, with Middle Earth. Also,as a professional musician - the lyrics, the music sets the tone for me and propels what is going on.
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> But all in all: real nice. Thanks for providing smut inspiration for the evening. And can I borrow Rumil? I have a thing or two for him to sketch Wink smiley face

Rumil is pretty amazing - isn't he? (I'm fond of him myself!)

Thanks
Zee

Sun Jul 06, 2003 8:49 am

Fun interlude, although I guess I'll weigh in on the song lyrics too. They don't really work for me, here or in the other story. Mostly because I don't know the songs that are quoted, so I don't know how they sound. So it's an element that doesn't necessarily add anything to the reader's experience, even though they add something to the author's. That was actually one of the reasons I left off reading "Empty Vessel"-- because I was feeling sort of like I was missing something that everyone else "got." Just my opinion, of course...

Sun Jul 06, 2003 7:25 pm

for goodness sake folks! bronwyn is a bard! what is a bard without music? thanks to you zee i download the music i dont know and have been buying up a bluestreak! thank you for introducing me to smetna and bach and cheap trick! i thought this was as brilliant as empty vessel! Laughing smiley face

imchelle

Thu Aug 26, 2004 4:23 pm

LOLOLOL I do not even pity Rumil for this, he was being stupid and needs to be punished. I hope Bronwyn managed to get away and can cool off before facing Haldir again and hope HE can calm down as well. *still giggling* Those two are a TRIP! *vbg*

Tue Jan 11, 2005 5:58 pm

play elf....what a novel idea! Twisted Evil smiley face

Thu Mar 10, 2005 10:38 pm

Haldir is having a bad day. *Snicker*

Tue Jun 28, 2005 12:13 am

ROTFLMAO!! This little PWP is so good. I am inspired! Twisted Evil smiley face

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