Reviews for "Friend of The Berror"

Sat Jul 03, 2004 7:09 pm

WOW! talk about breath-taking! Amazing, yet sad. Not a side that I would like to imagine in Sam. However, a quite original idea. A lovely poem too - your writing was enchanting! Very Happy smiley face

Sun Jul 04, 2004 12:53 pm

A very interesting and captivating idea, but your spelling's atrocious. Please! find a beta to help.

Sat Jul 10, 2004 1:02 pm

This is a very good concept and shows that you have a good level of imagination. I did find numerous errors, though. I know it's hard to find someone to beta (or proofread) things for you, but in lieu of a beta, you should do a thorough proofreading and spellcheck. Then readers can focus on the story and not the errors. Here are the errors I found:

In the title berror = bearer

"I" is always capitalized

The first letter of each sentence is capitalized

guid = guide

"unbarried"? - I don't recognize this word and I'm not certain what word you intend it to be.

getting to near = getting too near

tryed = tried

throug = through

wasthere = was there

flesh filled skin = flesh-filled skin

deseat = deceit

Mon Dec 27, 2004 2:50 pm

I would have to agree with Nancy and Andreth - you have an interesting and unusual idea here, and it's only hindered by the spelling errors. With a bit of proof-reading your work could be very good indeed. This has a very good rhythm to it, and would flow very nicely, as well as putting your idea forward well.

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