Reviews for "Eternal"

Thu Jul 08, 2004 7:08 am

WOW! I've marked this story - it's amazing! Smile smiley face

. I loved the first chapter - plus due to the mistake (curtsey) and blushes, you don't make the elves seem "perfect", but humanize them! Please, please update soon! Very Happy smiley face

Sat Jul 10, 2004 5:29 pm

Hello! Congratulations on giving the Silm fandom a chance! Its so very rare to get Silm fic! Very Happy smiley face

Now here is some feedback to consider:

* Elrilya is not a correct Elven name. The letter 'a' is not a feminine ending.
* The speech is bordering on being too modern and this comes close to ruining the atmosphere you are trying to create.
* Formatting! Crying or Very sad smiley face

Did you check this fic after uploading it? The sentances are all over the place.

* The inclusion of genuine Silm references ie place names etc is wonderful Very Happy smiley face

* You have a nice grasp of language regarding description.

Overall, i would say this is shaping up great but that you should be very careful with Elril as she is starting to read more teenybopper from Earth than Aman. Also, ease up on her physical descriptions. The reader should be the one to see she is beautiful by how you writer her - not from you just stating it.

Keep going, this will be a rare and enjoyable piece when finished! Carrot smiley face

Sun Jul 11, 2004 10:16 am

A wonderful new chapter! I was waiting impatiently for this! I hope you update faster next time! ( I know, I know - I'm greedy - but I can't help it!) lol. Very sweet - a neat and lovely idea with the singing...... so romantic! lol. *wanders off to check the rating*. Please, please update soon! Very Happy smiley face

Thu Feb 10, 2005 8:40 pm

really wonderful! i would say that things could be explained a little more about the journey to the two trees and the feelings of idril and elriya of them, and also make the steal;ing of the silmarils, as well as the death of the trees a little more than a paragraph, since they are so vital to the story and the events that occur because of them.

but please keep going! i look forwards toreading more!

Tue Mar 15, 2005 1:30 pm

I am so enjoying this story!! well written, intriguing characters and info right out of silm! looking forward to more!!!

Mon Mar 28, 2005 4:49 pm

it is a very enjoyable fic, and it is nice to read a quality Silmarillion fanfiction.

Thanks,
Regnet

Sat Jun 11, 2005 11:08 am

New chapter! Yes!! I wonder how much will this version of the story differ from the one on aff.net
Waiting for another update,
Triss (PGlorfindelF)

Sat Jun 11, 2005 12:32 pm

Well, I've just finished all of your posted chapters, and I must say that this story is absolutely wonderful Smile smiley face

I loved your latest chapter. Very Happy smiley face

After Glorfindel was saved from his unwanted companion at the feast, his interest in Elrilya seemed to increase. Oooooohhhh, I can't wait for your next update. This is really, really good. Smile smiley face

So, keep up the great work and update soon,

Michelle.... Very Happy smiley face

Sat Jun 11, 2005 1:18 pm

Wow! Now that's what I call a fast update! Very Happy smiley face

Another fantastic chapter! Now that Glorfindel, Idril, and Elrilya are finally home, it will be interesting to see how they interact with one another. Glorfindel seems to be taking his new, prestigious role in stride, so I guess that's a good sign.

I'll admit that I haven't read all of the Silmarillion, yet. It's really nice to read a great story about the earlier struggles and lives of the elves. Smile smiley face

Wondeful job! Now, I know that you've just updated TWICE in one day...I think Very Happy smiley face

...but yes, I'm going to be greedy and ask for you to update soon...again Very Happy smiley face

Hey, you can't blame a gal for trying! Very Happy smiley face

Michelle...

Sun Jun 12, 2005 3:37 pm

now that i've reviewed on fanfiction.net, i figured it was only fair to do the same here. i sense a growing relationship between elrilya and glorfindel in the next chapter... Very Happy smiley face

Regnet

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