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sivan
Joined: 30 Oct 2003
Reviews: 57
Location: Mirkwood
Tue Jul 27, 2004 3:37 pm
I love it.

You put inside so much feeling.

Thank you for writing it.

Sivan Smile smiley face
 
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SilentTears
Joined: 24 Jul 2003
Reviews: 23
Location: Mirkwood
Tue Jul 27, 2004 11:33 pm
That was beautiful. yet sooooo sad. but still beautiful.
 
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Viv

Joined: 25 Apr 2003
Reviews: 673
Location: Texas
Wed Jul 28, 2004 5:02 pm
This line was startling and evocative: "I feel naked in my skin." The flow and song-like quality of the piece are strengths as well. However, in a couple of places the poem drifts to empty cliche: "the depths of my heart," "my emptiness," "infinity." Also, grammatically, the last word in the poem should be "lie." Overall, this poem is compelling, but it could use some polish.
 
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