Reviews for "As Good As You"

Sat Nov 22, 2003 8:20 pm

The idea of the transfer of power wokrs well, primarily because it isa theme seen in all of LOTR. Old Paladin is sympathetic here, which did catch me off guard.

As for Pippin himself, his post-quest characterization is well-handled. He has matured, but is still a very personable hobbit. You have avoided the usual trap of treating the hobbits as children, which is one of my Pet Peeves.

There are some grammatical issues (it's for its comes to mind) and a slight tendancy to overdescribe. This seems to happen when a writer has a clear vision of the story, but is not quite comfortable with the characters and their emotions. That isn't the issue here; the characters aer well-drawn, and you are obviously involved with them emotionally. Since you do have such a command of the characters, you might want to reconsider your narrative. It is ok to use commas & semicolons, especially in the scene where the forms of light are being enumerated.

You have done a fine job with the characters.

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