Reviews for "Interrupted Journeys: Part One--New Journeys"

Sun Aug 08, 2004 6:45 am

Very good beginning. Looking forward to see how this progresses.
At last someone else who doesn't think the Thranduil wasn't a pervy monster. Surprised smiley face

Thu Aug 12, 2004 12:33 am

It is a shame that this story has not yet received the attention that it deserves! I found this story today and could not stop reading it for the life of me, and was utterly disappointed when I realized that there were only eight chapters. What I really enjoy about this story is the use of canonical references and the romantic quality of Thranduil courting his wife. It is a story line that we usually do not see. Heck, it is lucky if we get a story where Thranduil is the hard-nosed, yet lovable, king we all know he is, and not the abusive, tyrannical, megalomaniac people think he is.

Well written, good pacing, good choices of words, and an exceptional usage of dialogue that I find refreshing, free from modern day slang. Though, if there is one thing that I would do differently, it would be to write out words like "cannot" instead of "can't". Most people long ago hardly used contractions...Of course that is me be overly picky , because there is truly nothing wrong with this story. I hope that you update soon!

Aewithen

Thu Aug 12, 2004 4:06 am

Reply to Aewithen: Thank you for the wonderful review. It is amazing how much more fun it is to write when you get a little feedback. I definitely agree with you about contractions. I am a contraction fiend but it doesn't sound right in Thranduil's mouth. I try to remember to do a search and replace but I miss a few still. Anyway--just so you know, this story is entirely written and it is truthfully very long. I update a little at a time every time I get internet access (i.e. when no one at work is standing over my shoulder!). Some parts may be more interesting to readers than others because it covers a lot of territory. The first few chapters are Thranduil adapting to being a new king and hopefully new husband--that will not be perfectly smooth. Then we'll see his decision to move his people north. Then he and Lindomiel have Legolas. There follows a lot of the events in Legolas and Thranduil's life together. It will go all the way to Legolas' return to Eryn Lasgalen after the war and then to his departure to Valinor. Like I said, some parts will be more interesting to people than others depending on what they like--romance, drama, some angst...whatever. But I try to stick to cannon (all the event reference Tolkien's Tale of Years) and just explore people's relationships because to me the fascinating thing in LotR is the wonderful fellowship (not to steal vocabulary from Tolkien but that is what it is). I hope there continue to be parts you like. Thanks again for reviewing!

Fri Aug 13, 2004 12:35 am

That was too short!!!!!!!!!!! Must have more... anyway, good as always, even though it was a short one! Very Happy smiley face

P.S. Forgot to say- I know exactly what you mean about the feedback being a direct correlation (sp?) on how fast you update and how happy you are to continue writing. I will always try to review!

Fri Aug 13, 2004 9:45 am

Wonderful. This story is so well thought-out and interesting. I loved the scene with the twins and Elrond. I also appreciate the fact that you portray the different sects of elves as not always getting along. Too many stories portray elves as 'perfect' beings that skip through the forests singing 'tra la la' rather than three dimensional people who have different beliefs and contentions on each side. I also like that you have mentioned the deep bond that physical affection among elves signifies.

And yes, thanks for not making Thranduil a crazed, treasure hoarding, elven version of Caligula!

Fri Aug 13, 2004 11:22 am

Reply to Rapunzel: Thanks very much for the review! No, I definitely don't see poor abused Thranduil as Caligula though I wonder if some of the people writing about him might be related to Caligula. One of my favorite parts of this first chapter is how the different elves will interact with each other--first meetings, re-aquaintances. I think it would have been a very new atmosphere after Gil-galad, Amdir and Oropher died. Poor Elrond, really! What a change in his established politcal world and he got married then too! Oh no, I feel a plot bunny. And no, all my elves are not going to be singing tra la la through Mirkwood forest. In fact, we will be reintroduced to one here soon that Thranduil is not nearly frightened enough of. As I mentioned in a previous response--this is a pretty long and complex story that is going to cover a lot of territory. I hope you keep coming back and browsing through. Even if you hit parts that don't contain the subject matter that interests you the most, it will likely turn back around to something that is your cup of tea within a few chaps. Again, thanks for the review! It makes writing way more fun.

Fri Aug 13, 2004 1:39 pm

Delightful chapter... love the way you portray the twins as small children, and how Thranduil reacted to them. Can't wait to see what happens when Legolas is that age Twisted Evil smiley face

. Anyway, wonderul again, and now you must update!

Fri Aug 13, 2004 7:44 pm

Reply to Aewithen: I can't resist commenting--I love Legolas at that age. Both my own version of him and that of several other authors who seem to like the topic. I think elves could just be described as nothing but precocious as children and that makes great fiction.

Unfortunately, I live right in the path of Hurricane Charley. It ought to hit me in about half an hour or so. We are getting tropical storm force winds right now and expect 80-100 mph in a few minutes. There's no way we won't loose electricity and our fine power company has already warned us that we'll be without power for at least four days. Four days without internet access. I don't know if I can handle it.

Sun Aug 15, 2004 10:11 pm

Lovely as usual, and I am very glad that Charley decided not to hit you too hard!

Tue Aug 17, 2004 6:00 pm

Lovely new chapters! I was so happy to see the young, regular Lothlorien guard Haldir in the story (as he is one my favorites). Glad that everyone approves of Lindomiel and wondering what kind of trouble that dark-haired elleth can make for Thranduil and Lindomiel. Waiting anxiously for more!

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