Reviews for "I don't wanna miss a thing."

Mon Aug 23, 2004 4:34 pm

If you skip the lyrics (which I always do in songfics; those quotes belong to someone other than the author of the piece I'm reading), there isn't much here. The idea is very compelling, but I'd really like it if you could set the scene, tell the vignette, without all the lyrics in the way. I'm a sucker for Arwen/Aragorn bits, and this one certainly has some deep feeling going on, it just isn't fleshed out enough.

Mon Aug 23, 2004 9:31 pm

I find that I have to concur with Viv. Songfics are not really my cup of tea, but I am trying to develop an appreciation for them. Imho songfics are a hard thing to write, because it is hard to make a smooth transition from the thoughts conveyed by the song lyrics and what the author is writing. And in this case, the Aerosmith song totally overwhelms what little there is of your writing. To use Viv's analogy about your writing not being fleshed out enough - think of the song lyrics as the skeleton and your writing as the flesh. The song lyrics should give shape to your writing and not be sticking out and distracting the reader.

Thu Aug 26, 2004 8:38 am

I'm going to have to agree with the above reviewers here. There is more song than fic here. Songfics are difficult creatures at best. Lord knows, I write enough of them! Very Happy smiley face

. If you take out the lyrics - there is very little here. Rather than write a few sentences around the lyrics, the lyrics should wrap around and enhance the emotion of the story. There is plenty of emotion here, however it is totally overwhelmed by the huge chunks of lyrics.

The lyrics are also easier to swallow, if you use them in smaller proportions. I recommend no more than 4 lines at a time.

Wed Sep 15, 2004 7:31 am

Sorry to concur, but I do. I read this mainly because I want to understand what a songfic is. So far, I have not read any that work for me. Either they overwhelm the story, as here, or they leave me wondering 'what was the point of that?' But I agree that the song should enhance the story, not the other way around. More like the words running through the character's head, rather than aloud for others to hear. The main focus should be the story. The song is icing on the cake. Too much icing, and people will not eat the cake. Maybe you could try just writing the story while YOU listen to the song, then if you feel it warranted, add some lines. I would encourage you to go back and re-write this. It is compelling and has great potential.

Sat Jun 03, 2006 6:35 am

As this was featured, I feel compelled to comment again. Nothing has changed here. As a matter of fact, re-reading it has only added to the confusion. There are parts that just do not jive with the actual events of the story. Therefore, this is still just a song with a bit of narration. Neither the song or the story are enhanced by each other.

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