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Aerin
Joined: 16 Jun 2004
Reviews: 22
Location: ORLI\'S LIPS are distracting me
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Thu Sep 02, 2004 4:56 pm
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Part I
This has me completely hooked. Your writting style is very close to poetic. I love how you describe everyting, without being overly flowery. Very well done. I am most proud to be your first reviewer. |
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Yavanie
Joined: 02 Jun 2004
Reviews: 122
Location: Texas
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| Wow! I can't put into words what to say. I am a twin. This well depicts the views of being always concious of living up to your own expectations compared to what you think others expect from you. Your descriptions of scenes and imagery were so well done I swear I could smell the sea! I'll also admit: I cried through the last chapter. Beautifully done. Bravo! I will read some more of your stories. |
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sindohte
Joined: 14 May 2003
Reviews: 157
Location: Rubbing up against an Elf
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Thu Sep 02, 2004 11:39 pm
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| A great piece of writing moves the reader. You can consider me moved. Jess, I am simply amazed by the quiet beauty of this story. There were so many things that were so poignant - Elrond feeling insecure over having not accomplished as much as his brother, Elros fussing over all the details of the feast prepared for his long estranged brother, and then the final parting. Beautiful, simply beautiful. |
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Beruthiel
Joined: 15 Apr 2004
Reviews: 8
Location: Sandwiched between the Twinkies
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Fri Sep 03, 2004 3:49 am
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| Bravo! Your story really touched me, and that does not happen often in fan fiction. Truly magnificent! |
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ViJanaway
Joined: 07 May 2004
Reviews: 78
Location: Near Dallas, Texas
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Fri Sep 10, 2004 7:30 am
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So very good. Not maudlin, or sappy...just...beautiful.
Made me cry.   |
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Haleth
Joined: 27 Sep 2003
Reviews: 96
Location: The ruins of Tharbad.
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Fri Sep 10, 2004 3:03 pm
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| What wonderful insights into the relationship between Elros and Elrond and the reasons behind Elros' choice. You've taken a canon character about which almost nothing is known (beyond the dry facts) and fleshed him out beautifully, with the strengths of his personality well balanced by his weaknesses. For all that they are different, they still cherish the importance of their family. And all of this is done with great style and restraint. Brava! |
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fadagaski
Joined: 23 Mar 2004
Reviews: 4
Location: England
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Tue Apr 12, 2005 11:36 am
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| That was really lovely. It all came together like so many different threads weaving to make a greater pattern. In the first chapter, what stands out most is the reasoning given for Elros' decision - his choice to direct his own destiny. In the second, their reuniting and the almost-mature Elrond looking on his brother's accomplishments. In the last, the dignified passage of Elros was heartbreaking, and the Eldar living daily what Men face at death's door. The subtle hints strewn throughout about Elrond having kin, becoming greater than he is, finding a place of his own as Elros did, and continuing to aid the heirs of his brother ... astounding. |
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Alatariel
Joined: 27 Nov 2005
Reviews: 3
Location: wearing raincoats, standing solo, in the sun
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Mon Nov 28, 2005 1:36 am
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| Your writing is beautiful. I have a flare for fics that explore the little things that Tolkien did not elaborate on and I have often wondered what the backstory of Elrond and Elros could be. Your fiction is the first I've read based on that subject that has captivated me. Your words are so descriptive - I could feel the tension between brothers when they first meet each other again and the bittersweet air when they realize they will say good-bye again so soon. And the foreshadowing...lightly placed in the right places. |
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