Reviews for "The Next Day"

Tue Aug 24, 2004 4:07 pm

Definitely some powerful images in this piece, and such nice word selection: "her brown eyes spilling tears to leave clean tracks down her dirty face." You may want to have a grammar/punctuation person give it a quick proofread; the errors were minor, but they were frequent enough for me to notice them (starting with the AN: "whilst I was reading inspired me to right this"). Still, despite those little grammar hiccups, this was a lovely piece. Thank you for letting me read!

Tue Aug 24, 2004 5:26 pm

Lovely. There were a few bugs to work out (as Viv mentioned: grammar, punctuation), but otherwise it was wonderful. I could see every detail clearly in my mind. Wonderful story!

Fri Sep 03, 2004 3:59 pm

Oh...okay. SO that made me CRY. A good cry though. Excellent story. Most excellent.

Fri Sep 03, 2004 3:59 pm

Oh...okay. SO that made me CRY. A good cry though. Excellent story. Most excellent.

Thu Mar 03, 2005 9:21 pm

this was very good. so sad. I just want to point out that one sentence mentions Bilbo's birthday party 14 months before... Bilbo's infamous party was years and years before this. Frodo stayed in Hobbiton after Bilbo left for years and years. but other than that, it was a VERY good vignette.

Sat Mar 05, 2005 3:34 pm

Thanks Regnet, but I was actually shamelessly using movie-verse in the non-movie verse section with that little detail about the birthday party. LoL. Thank you for reading ^_^

~Saoirse

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