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Elegantcouture
Joined: 09 Aug 2004
Reviews: 4
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Sat Oct 09, 2004 1:28 am
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.... Wow.
I'm absolutely dumb founded by this story. I'm speechless.
It is SO beautiful, so touching, and your description is so vivid I could picture it all. I love it. Wonderful! |
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Moralanqua
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 167
Location: Scotland
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Sat Oct 09, 2004 4:23 am
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This is a really nice piece and as a reader and canon whore, I especially appreciated the efforts you made to keep Faramir and Eowyn in character. Lovely!
Here are some little things you need to attend to:
Passive voice errors
Punctuation errors
Horses wouldnt have Quenya names.
"...throwing up half the river"
"...for Heavens sake" >> Modernisms not appropriate. You meant 'retching' not "throwing up" and there is no Heaven to refer to in Middle earth.
These mistakes are all in the beta reading stage and not the actual premise. You execute that with due care and attention which adds quality and atmosphere. This was a job well done and I'd love to read more from you on how these characters got on in married life!
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Eyborg
Joined: 08 May 2004
Reviews: 101
Location: Reykjavík, Iceland
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Sat Feb 05, 2005 6:57 pm
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Awwwww... that was a lovely story! He he, I guess that me & Éowyn have a lot in common (except that I can swim, but I'm a bad rider). But this was really beautiful. Thank you!  |
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Cormamin
Joined: 19 Mar 2005
Reviews: 2
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Sat Mar 19, 2005 6:50 pm
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| ^_^ This was a really good story. I followed you here from Fanfiction (never reviewed there, wish I had), and your work is very...I'm not sure of the correct word for it. You capture scenes, such as in 'Chestnut and Honeysuckle,' in such a light that it makes me want to laugh and cry at the same time because it seems so sweet. You made good use of first person here, and it almost seemed a combination of second as well. In short, please keep up the great work. Hopefully I'll be seeing more of you soon. |
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Meneltari
Joined: 01 Jul 2003
Reviews: 4
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Mon May 30, 2005 11:09 am
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This is a really cute ficlet, I absolutely love it.
I have just one minor detail I'd like to make you aware of- Finduilas, aka The Mother, died when Faramir was five. A small amendment can fix that slip-up.
That aside, this is perfect. |
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NeumeIndil
Joined: 06 Jun 2005
Reviews: 156
Location: St. Louis, Missouri, USA
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Mon Jun 13, 2005 10:29 pm
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| Wow. Well done. Glad someone's brave enough to go into his head, and I like that we didn't know who it was right away. Dang. I wanna go swimming! |
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