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SpaceWeavil

Joined: 27 May 2004
Reviews: 365
Location: Looking at shiny things
Sat Nov 27, 2004 3:00 pm
A nice moment from Aragorn's history that I haven't seen described before. I did wonder though what made you use present tense all throughout, rather than conventional third person past tense? Was this to create a sense of anxiety?
 
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derakh
Joined: 20 Jun 2003
Reviews: 20
Location: Salem, Oregon
Mon Nov 29, 2004 1:01 am
Cute story. I liked the image of the usually powerful, in control, and action-oriented Aragorn feeling so helpless and a fish out of water in the sense that he can't do anything. I also wondered about the present tense. It threw me off and perhaps that was the purpose? As I said a cute story but it would have been all the better if past tense had been used. Smile smiley face
 
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Duchess

Joined: 25 Mar 2004
Reviews: 187
Location: North Carolina
Mon Nov 29, 2004 2:51 pm
Sweet. Smile smiley face Picturing Aragorn this way is very amusing. *giggle*
 

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Thuriniel
Joined: 29 Jul 2003
Reviews: 94
Location: Watching the purple sky fly over me ...
Mon Dec 20, 2004 3:20 pm
It's very hard to write in the present tense, but you have done really (I did notice a couple of uses of past tense, but I don't think they were too distracting).

Even though it's a short piece, you have been able to capture a lot of emotion. The naming of Eldarion was a fitting ending.
 
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