Reviews for "And in the Darkness Bind Them: Vol I"

Fri Feb 04, 2005 5:54 pm

Wow! I haven't had much time for reading fanfic lately, so I just got to read 3 or 4 new chapters at a time. Lucky me! Smile smiley face

This is such an extraordinary story! I never imagined I could feel empathy for the Witch-king (-to-be), but you have drawn him as a three-dimensional person that is, in fact, truly fascinating. And, after all he's been through, the poor kid misses his parents, and is sad that he will never see them again! (Like that old saying: Be careful what you wish for...)

Your descriptive prose is lovely (even if what it is describing is not lovely...) and evocative; it is almost as if I am seeing the places you describe in my mind.

Please keep the chapters coming, Spaceweavil! This is a truly fine piece of writing...

- Barbara

Fri Feb 04, 2005 7:54 pm

Ok, your description didn't sound too scary so I decided to give it a try. I'm on the chapter where Marillion is left at the 'school' and I thought I'd better leave a review before I forget some details. First of all--God Space Weavil, this is sooo sad. You did 'oppressive, scary atmosphere' perfectly in the chapter where Marillion is born. And the second chapter where we see how his mother treats him made me want to cry. If you want to make the Witch King a super sympathetic character, you've done it. No wonder the poor thing turns out as he does. But the little glimpses into his emerging evil/power hungry character--like him thinking that if his father had enough spine to stand up to his mother he would be the heir to a kingdom--are very well done. But then I felt so bad for him again when he saw the maternal figure out the window. I am almost afraid to go see where that is leading. This is definitely very powerful.

Fri Feb 04, 2005 8:04 pm

“I am here,” he said, “because my mother believes me to be evil.”

Silence followed. The others stared.

“Well,” breathed Olwen with a dry laugh. “That is hard to top.”

“Are you evil then, Marillion?” asked Meldir.

“So she believed,” muttered Marillion with a smile. “Sometimes I wish she had told me how I might become evil, then I would know if I am doing the right thing.”

“Well some dark influences might make this place more interesting.”

That is a great interchange, as was the whole introductory dialogue with the boys. I can certainly see boys finding something like that horse and thinking it is cool because of its gross factor. But geez, Space, how did you think of that. That was gross. Horrid, really. Definitely had the impact you were looking for.

Fri Feb 04, 2005 8:10 pm

Ok, just wanted to say that you do boys VERY well. The rabbit stew thing was twisted and that whole sequence brillant dialogue. I am not certain I have the courage to go see what just came in behind Morillion though.

Fri Feb 04, 2005 8:17 pm

Well that is a cruel and spooky little mystery that you've set up with the boy and the woman. Again, I felt so sorry for Morillion with his father and his sudden discovery of the beauty of Numenor. With this background that you've painted, you can definitely understand why he turned to Sauron.

Fri Feb 04, 2005 8:27 pm

I have to say, you got me with the openly line--I was looking for a toast and I got a verb drill. As a former language teacher, I burst out laughing at that scene. I could sooo see it. The conversation with the bar man was very well done. Certainly increased your mystery there. I especially liked the last line--more clever than he looks, I see.

Fri Feb 04, 2005 8:36 pm

You are doing a really good job laying out this mystery. I loved the journal and thought how cool all that was. Then I got to the end of the chapter. I am really glad I am reading this affter the first part is done so I don't have to suffer the cliffies.

Fri Feb 04, 2005 8:44 pm

Yes, the blood of Elros indeed. I have always liked the 'magic' in LotR. And you did a good job with it here. I'm afraid to see Morillion go home though--I agree with his thoughts that little good could come of it. The development of his personality is well done in this chap.

Fri Feb 04, 2005 8:56 pm

Wow! Dealing in Death is a powerful chapter! The emotions/introspections are so well done in this. So sad in the parts where he wishes for the love he deserved. Scary in the parts where you can see him turning to evil. And then boom, the magpie thing! That was well done. And I loved the description of the fat husband on the horse!

Fri Feb 04, 2005 9:02 pm

I felt really sorry for Morillion in this chapter. You know he was right that if his father had the guts to stand up to his family, things would have turned out better. They made their own bed by the way they treated him and this chapter was particularly sad. I would have run off too. I say good for him.

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