Reviews for "And in the Darkness Bind Them: Vol I"

Sun Mar 20, 2005 12:18 pm

Don't worry Vana! I understand completely! Space your writing never fails to captivate me for hours. I just sat and read the entire thing when i had caught your post on the SSP thread...wow...i am glad i decided to go to your profile to read this.

Marillion is quite a character isn't he? *grins*

Fri Mar 25, 2005 1:47 pm

I have only read a little so far but I must say you have portrayed the future creepiness of the Witch King well. On one hand you feel bad his mother was so cold on the other you feel bad that she knew him to be evil yet he was her son. I cannot imagine being in her position.

Sat Apr 30, 2005 5:07 pm

This story is very addictive. I am waiting with baited breath to see the reunion of Marillion with his "family." Are they really family when they treat you that way? Although, if I had a vision of my future son as the future Witch King of Agmar, I think I would be a little afraid of becoming close to him, too. Confused smiley face

I usually do not review the stories I read very often because I have little time online, so I usually download. But I am enjoying this one so much that I was so excited to see a "new" chapter I decided to leave you a little encouragement.
'Aiya Spacewevil, Elenion Ancalima!'

Fri May 20, 2005 12:06 am

I freely admit that I am having problems with Estelian(sp?). He's beginning to remind me of all the Igors of Mad Scientist movies. Limping, smarmy subservience, sleazy personally...I think he's really not an asset to the story. I know you want Marillon to have a foil, so that he can speak to someone who will act as the audience's proxy. But this guy is just too reminiscent of the drooling, hapless helpers to work the way I think you want him to work.

Fri May 20, 2005 2:02 pm

Thank you all for your comments and thank you KK for your honesty. There are a few spots where I'm going to edit Estelince' lines / descriptions in the previous chapter, just a case of removing a few words here and there, to try and make him a little less two dimensional. My image of him, as I've said to you in PM, was very different and I actually enjoyed writing him, but maybe my writing has been lacking and some of the nuances haven't come across, like the incident in the inn earlier with Marillion's colouring.

At the moment, I won't be editing anything drastically or deleting any chapters, although I have taken your comments on board and am considering if Estelince needs to be removed entirely from the story. I want to give this more thought, as it would involve a radical rewrite of this next section, and might have knock on effects for other plot lines that I need. I'm not particularly 'attuned' to this fic at this particular moment, as I'm in the middle of studying for my law finals, but I will give it some consideration when I am more in the right mood and can think about this clearly. As it stands, I'll post the next few updates as is, since Estelince isn't in those chapters anyway, and if I do decide to redraft this section again, I'll make that clear so as not to cause confusion.

Obviously, if anyone has any further opinions on what can be done to improve the story, don't hesitate to let me know, either here or in PM, and thank you all once again for taking the time and effort to help me out on this.

Space Weavil

Sat Jun 04, 2005 12:06 am

I was so happy to see an update e-mail in my mail box! I really liked this new chapter. The language was a nice blend between old and modern, and the formality set the tone perfectly. I can't wait to read more about Naltimir (sp?). He's a smooth talker, a very nice candidate for Mouth of Sauron. I wouldn't have interpreted his character that way, but now that I read it, it fits perfectly.

Mon Jun 06, 2005 5:19 pm

I enjoy your story very much. Quite interesting POV on the Witch-King.

I liked the last chapter a lot. Telperien reminds me of Elisabeth I of England...
Please update soon!

Thu Jun 09, 2005 4:19 am

This chapter reminds me of the "Masque of the Red Death".

Mon Jul 11, 2005 3:15 pm

Wow, you have updated! So the principal characters meet at last. Please, continue, I am eager to learn what happens next.

Mon Nov 28, 2005 8:31 am

I read this through last night - well done! - I especially enjoyed your characterization of Marillion and the parallels between Ilmare and Miriel. - producing the best and the worst of what the race had to offer. I liked how you showed the decadance of the court and developed the ills that brought along the fall of Numenor. I'll be interested to follow this as it continues.

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