Reviews for "Shameless Revisited"
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sindohte
Joined: 14 May 2003
Reviews: 157
Location: Rubbing up against an Elf
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Thu Dec 23, 2004 10:58 am
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| Welcome to Open Scrolls. Given that there are not many Istari fics, I decided to give your story a try. You have a clear, engaging writing style, which is a definite strength. However, I wish that there could have been a bit more character development with the OFC. Certainly you do not and should not give the plot away to the reader, but just a little more insight into why the OFC would search out Saruman would be helpful. And a final note, while Natasha is indeed a beautiful name it struck me as being undecidedly Rohirric, given that it is Russian in origin. |
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Last edited by sindohte on Thu Dec 23, 2004 11:01 am |
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BlackTraitor
Joined: 23 Dec 2004
Reviews: 1
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Thu Dec 23, 2004 9:45 pm
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sindohte said
> Welcome to Open Scrolls. Given that there are not many Istari fics, I decided to give your story a try. You have a clear, engaging writing style, which is a definite strength. However, I wish that there could have been a bit more character development with the OFC. Certainly you do not and should not give the plot away to the reader, but just a little more insight into why the OFC would search out Saruman would be helpful. And a final note, while Natasha is indeed a beautiful name it struck me as being undecidedly Rohirric, given that it is Russian in origin.
Hi! thanks for reading my story!
I have come to that conclusion as well about the name *I just always liked it* - I have named her Jahi- it is a female spirit who is given to pursuing evil- also- *** the main premise for the lady is given in the original Shameless- but even there I could certainly give her more background! Thanks so much for the helpful and polite review! ^_^ |
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FairlightMuse
Joined: 14 Jul 2004
Reviews: 14
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Mon Dec 27, 2004 5:56 am
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At last! A refreshing break from the ordinary strain of fictions! Congratulations! I very much like what you are doing, and look forward to reading more!
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Last edited by FairlightMuse on Mon Dec 27, 2004 6:00 am |
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