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inglor

Joined: 26 Apr 2004
Reviews: 201
Location: Not here, not there, not anywhere
Tue Dec 28, 2004 3:04 pm
Wonderfully romantic. I like your characterizations of the two newlyweds. Lothiriel's nervous chatter was priceless.

Inglor
 
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NancyBrooke
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 558
Location: In a motel 6 by the airport
Tue Dec 28, 2004 6:05 pm
Oooh! Lots of fun and, as Inglor commented above, great characterizations. I particularly liked that you made Lothiriel a shoot-from-the-hip kind of gal; not the usual ingenue.

You might have a Beta go over it for some punctuation and dropped word clean up; then it would be perfect!
 
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