Reviews for "Paths We Tread"

Thu Feb 03, 2005 1:37 pm

Please don't hate me for this review. I am not critizing you or your writing skill, just this piece.

I found it to flowery with words and a hard read. I got a tad lost at "a relief" and is unashamedly really a word? Maybe a few fixes? I really like the idea and if you do make any fixes please tell and I will reread.

Thu Feb 03, 2005 4:43 pm

Twice in as many days I've been given a deeper appreciation of Legolas - what's the world coming to? Laughing smiley face

I very much enjoyed reading this. I thought your depiction of Legolas very insightful, and his struggle with the Gift of Men most convincing. I missed hearing the fond gruffness of Gimli's voice however. I thought your choice of more formal and flowery language there made him sound, if it's possible, Elvish!

Watch out for those tense changes!

Thu Feb 03, 2005 5:04 pm

I loved this. I am a big sucker for these contemplative pieces. I love seeing the character's inner thoughts and feelings and I think you did an excellent job capturing the personalities of two canon characters in a very difficult moment. Great job.

Fri Feb 04, 2005 12:08 pm

Okay someone had me a kleenex! Cry smiley face

I am just a sucker for these Gimli/Legolas stories. Some are cute and funny while others are sweet and tender. I think you have touched on a deeper meaning to what elves feel. This is the second story I have read on OSA where someone has touched on how the elves may envy mortals as much as mortals envy elves. I cannot imagine outliving a lot of my friends as Legolas will have to do.

Anyway, your story was beautiful and touching. I thought the bond between the two of them was expressed well. Gimli was not always gruff. I think back to the "side by side with a friend" part of the movie when Gimli was touched and said "Aye, I could do that." And for him to follow Legolas to the undying lands shows not only a bond of friendship but an understand of your friend's thoughts and feelings as only your closest friend would know or sense about you.

See what happens when you defend me on a forum thread from the evilness of my own friends - I come and read your story! Very Happy smiley face

Sun Feb 06, 2005 11:03 pm

Very lovely. I thought you showed the growing depth of freindship and a deeper understanding between Legolas and Gimli very nicely. It was nice to see a private moment between the two of a side that probably neither would have been able to show the other not too long ago. Both have been changed during this journey.

I also felt there was great emotion on Legolas' part at maybe coming to a certain realization in time that he'd known was coming, had heard, had known, but in that moment things came to a painful reality. The time for Elves were no more, it was now the time of Man.

Kendra

Mon Apr 04, 2005 12:37 pm

Very nice indeed Smile smiley face

I'm by no means expert in entering the elvish psyche, but this was a very well expressed look at just that, the singular point of difference that makes them hard to understand and somehow removed from the rest of us: immortality. there was a small moment in the first half where it feels like the speaker changed but it didn't, and that was a tad confusing; but otherwise a very nice read Smile smiley face

Tue Jun 07, 2005 1:21 pm

I just thought it was great. I did not find it too flowery (but maybe that is because I like more formal language). One thing I do find disconcerting is the switch from present to past tense. I think it should remain one or the other. Other than that, I am glad I saw this on the story of the day. It is well worth the side trip from my daily doings. Thank you for sharing.

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