Reviews for "That Which Will Never Return"
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Anni
Joined: 14 Feb 2005
Reviews: 7
Location: Vancouver/UK
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Sun Feb 20, 2005 9:27 pm
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Now I enjoyed this story. You have the characterisations of Elladan and Elrohir off pat. They are sensitively and well written, as is the character of Erestor. As far as the storyline is concerned the slow degrading of the Elven Realms back into nature and the distress of the land is both atmospheric and palpable. I could almost feel myself wanting to curse the Elves for leaving something in distress and because of that feeling I could understand the twins reluctance to leave. No they may not feel the pull of the sea, but right now is not the time for them to go. They have the feeling that all people feel when they watch everyone they know go away and they themselves have to remain behind. There is a bereft, grieving process going on. However they both know, deep inside, that it isn't the right time to go. The land needs them, Aragorn and Arwen need them, the Elves that do remain need them.
I think that it's right not to end on a hanging note. An epilogue sounds good. Perhaps you could approach from the moment of their final choice, maybe as they watch the shores of Middle-earth recede into the distance and find themselves having to face a new challenge in a land they have never seen. Maybe it needs to be ended from the POV of those on Middle-earth no longer needing their presence. The secondborn have moved on and come into their own. The twin's time has finally come, and they also need to depart and move on. The leaving would be bittersweet and poignant, filled with regrets for what they have left behind, yet also filled with excitement of a new place and reunion with their family and friends.
It's probably been written many times before, but with your writing I feel you could truly do it justice. |
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ViJanaway
Joined: 07 May 2004
Reviews: 78
Location: Near Dallas, Texas
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Fri Mar 04, 2005 3:07 am
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Elladan and Elrohir are my favorite elves after Haldir...
This is a nice story about them...and quite well-done.
I look forward to the Epilogue.
Just my opinion...they sailed.  |
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