Reviews for "Prayer For An Elven Maiden's Heart"

Sat Feb 19, 2005 10:36 pm

lol. Nice commentary by the elves in your head. V. nice poem Laughing smiley face

Sun Feb 20, 2005 4:15 am

Poem itself was good, including a really nice re-telling of the movieverse bit: "She's riding in dreadful silence, straight to the sea, her heart is aching, her arms are shaking, she's wondering What if he comes back to me?" Arwen's great Action in LoTR is her faithfulness and loyalty. She never gives up hope (literally and figuratively, since her Man's name is Hope), and you've bridged the book and movie in this poem here, I think, giving her much more strength and interior fortitude than Peter Jackson bothered with. Nice insight. Smile smiley face

(The AN was really long and distracting, and I almost gave up and clicked Back. But I'm really glad I stuck it out. Just a tip: you might lure more readers if you cut down on that lengthy and non-related AN.)

Sun Feb 20, 2005 9:37 am

Viv said
> Poem itself was good, including a really nice re-telling of the movieverse bit: "She's riding in dreadful silence, straight to the sea, her heart is aching, her arms are shaking, she's wondering What if he comes back to me?" Arwen's great Action in LoTR is her faithfulness and loyalty. She never gives up hope (literally and figuratively, since her Man's name is Hope), and you've bridged the book and movie in this poem here, I think, giving her much more strength and interior fortitude than Peter Jackson bothered with. Nice insight. Smile smiley face

(The AN was really long and distracting, and I almost gave up and clicked Back. But I'm really glad I stuck it out. Just a tip: you might lure more readers if you cut down on that lengthy and non-related AN.)

Yes Yes. I agree! I was thinking the same thing, when and I went back reread, infact I think I'm going to edit it, and take it off.

I won't make my ANs as long as that when I write other stories, just thought I'd give readers an insight on whom they were reading from. Lol

And Thank You so much for all your kind words, they have truly made me elated to be writing here. ^^

Sun Feb 20, 2005 9:48 pm

I like the experimental quality of the poem, and that you've tried different types of stanzas to get your point across. It makes the poem a very interesting read. As Viv's said, the poem did get the point across very well. My only suggestion (other than about shortening or removing the author's note) would be to have a beta reader check over the work. This isn't a negative reflection on you as a writer at all and it's not meant as a criticism. There's actually a forum here specifically dedicated to beta reading and I think most people here will work that way. It sometimes helps to get another pair of eyes to look over the work and find the little errors that can get in the way of a good story / poem (for instance, dyeing / dying).

Hope you don't take this as an insult, as it's not meant as one, and the poem itself is really quite good.

Sun Mar 06, 2005 8:26 pm

That is absolutely beautiful. However, I've caught a couple of typos. But so far so good. Arwen wanting "daddy" to understand that she has to wait for her man...loved that part! Totally modern!

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