Reviews for "The First Age of the Sun: Triumph"

Sun Feb 20, 2005 9:58 am

Yay! It's off to a roaring start. I like it very much so far. I did like 'the stars must be happier here' Smile smiley face

(Finrod is such a charmer) And Luthien/Finrod is so much a better idea than Luthien/Beren. I can't wait to see what happens next Exclamation smiley face

Sun Feb 20, 2005 3:29 pm

"He is the eldest and she the youngest of the children of Earwen" ... I think it's interesting that Melian would identify folks matrilineally. Indeed, females of her line tend to be more remarked than typical females in Middle-earth. Nice little detail there; I hadn't picked up on it before. Smile smiley face

And, as I've told you before, your characterisations are a joy. Galadriel is prickly, beautiful, and terrifying; Finrod charming, full of energy and wonder; Celeborn the consummate diplomat who also has sufficient courage to be interested in Galadriel. Looking forward to more.

Sun Feb 20, 2005 4:03 pm

wonderful absolutely wonderful

Inglor once again you capture my respect for attempting this one and so amazingly done! Great job! *hugs*

~Arta

Mon Feb 21, 2005 2:16 am

Yay! A sil fic! with coughhackhackmycoughcnamehackhack in it! Laughing smiley face

Love this one, looking forward to more! Very Happy smiley face

Tue Feb 22, 2005 5:25 pm

And I do know you too well, Findarato and I can not compete with your need for discovery.

Hehe, she ain't no dummy Findarato! The unknown my big brown ASS. Why didn't he just say, you know, I need some new wimmins? I mean, duh! lol, I knew you were gonna make him with quirks. Verrrrry crafty Mr Inglor. ditto on all the shit Viv said about characterizations. But then, you have that ability to make one wonder about every little nuance. Makes 'skimming' your stories pretty impossible. (Annoying when I want to give an, 'oh yeah, nice story', kind of review) And you started right out of the gate with this one.

hehe, Shining at her like a fox's. Whoopie, this one's gonna be big fun. Stay on your toes boys and girls.

Thu Feb 24, 2005 2:03 pm

Wow! can't compete with the previous comments. Well done! Very much looking forward to more, more, more, more.....

Mon Feb 28, 2005 4:16 pm

Inglor:

You managed to give a real "First Age" feel to the setting and dialogue. Artanis, as always, a strong and opinionated woman! (I mean that she is a strong woman!) I love your Artanis (least of all for making Beleg into a ball of ravishing elvish lust.) Imagine her sticking Nenya under your nose in the Third Age.

I liked the parting of Amarie and Finrod and the silver betrothal band. (I presume worn on the correct hand and the correct finger...) I only wish there were some more angst in their parting. Amarie did not even look back at Finrod--the man she would have spent eternity with. (sigh) I tend to think betrothal is a VERY big step in elves' lives, so a little bit more on the dialogue, please? Then again, maybe she finally, in her heart, knew Finrod was a jerk and then was really ticked off at him and "dumped" him! LOL! Laughing smiley face

As for the alliteration: Findarato Finrod Finarfinion! WOW! Only a real Silm nut could read that without flinching or head-scratching!

Finally, I love the allusion to stars. They are First Agers--you NEED to mention the stars!

Looking forward to seeing where this goes... Very Happy smiley face

Thu Mar 24, 2005 4:22 pm

I enjoy the simple imagery and the affection that is clearly felt between Finrod and Artanis. Love it quite simply *grins*

Sun Mar 27, 2005 4:54 pm

Man, this chapter just got me thinking of all the, "wait, but if Luthien marries Finrod..." Starting with, well sucky that Barahir's gonna save his ass. And...and...and what about the Silmaril, Beren has no reason to go get it now and Finrod won't help him even if he does...and OH MAN on down to, "but what about the twins?!?" Now I have the brain seizure inducing headache from hell. Props to you Inglor, this is a MAJOR undertaking. (I'm going to take a deep breath and read without speculating. I'll leave the hard part of figuring it all out in your capable hands).

And Celeborn and Gladdy, holy crap, do any of these primary age elves know about 'hard to get?' And poor Beleg has to go riding across the countryside with these four? lol, this is so great...too much stuff, wayyy too much stuff in one chap.

Oh my goodness, Inglor, your Luthien is cracking me up. For all her delicate beauty, she's as subtle as a mack truck! And the plumbing comment was too funny. Thingol must not be much of a naturalist if that's all the beauty he sees in Doriath. Kinda nice the way Finrod gets to go shopping for Nargothrond from the comfort of his own guest rooms too. Razz smiley face

Celeborn in turn saw Luthien’s nearly imperceptible flush, saw the pulse quicken in her neck. What game is she playing, he thought.

Good to know I'm not alone here Cel.

Totally digging the parallels between the arrogance of the men and the way that they are in awe of their women too. Loving your wonderfully evocotive writing, I can just see your characters moving and reacting. One thing, too short. Update soon, this is more fun than naked twister!

Sun Mar 27, 2005 11:14 pm

Inglor,

This is really good! Your work is always good so no surprise there. Please update soon!

I loved the discussion between Thingol and Melian at the end of ch 4. I love Finrod's curiosity and the whole concept of him and Luthien. Can't wait for more!

Ellie

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