Reviews for "Grey Havens"

Sat Mar 12, 2005 11:21 pm

Hehe... I'm the first reviewer again! Very Happy smiley face

I'm curious to know what happens next. I like your potrayal of the stormy sea, the ship... and I think I'll read more of this before I comment any more. ^_^

Sun Mar 13, 2005 5:11 am

Space! I'm so glad you decided to repost this one. I love this story and YOU HAD BETTER FINISH IT! I love everything about it and this was THE inspiration for me using Cirdan in Circle, though I don't think I ever told you that. I just love everything about him in this story and the next chapter is sooo soooo good, so hurry up and post. It'll be so speshul. And penguins. Very Happy smiley face

Jesxxx

Sun Mar 13, 2005 7:48 am

Yes, I remember this one too and the scene in this chapter posted was an inspiration for me in one of the chapters of the new First Age story I'm playing with. I loved this one and I wondered what happened to it. Definitely looking forward to it. Please continue to feed your muse. Smile smiley face

Sun Mar 13, 2005 10:48 pm

This is delightful! I love the soft, careful shifts from first-person to third. You can cover a lot of ground (time-wise) that way, without the story feeling rushed. And considering how long elven tales can take, this might turn out to be brilliant. Also, it's incredibly satisfying to see Cirdan caught in a crush. hee.

Tue Mar 15, 2005 5:22 pm

In Chapter 2, you say that Elinel is Bellarato's sister. In Chapter 3, you introduce Silanel, Bellarato's wife ... who then turns out to be Elinel's mother. Is *that* how things are done in their family? (I'm guessing it's just a typo, but maybe not.) How clever of you to bring the setting in so strongly, almost as though it is another character. I can almost smell sea air. Is the setting going to be important in later plot points? Or is it metaphorical? And, oh my ... Ereinion is one smooth operator.

Tue Mar 15, 2005 5:39 pm

Viv said
> In Chapter 2, you say that Elinel is Bellarato's sister. In Chapter 3, you introduce Silanel, Bellarato's wife ... who then turns out to be Elinel's mother. Is *that* how things are done in their family? (I'm guessing it's just a typo, but maybe not.) How clever of you to bring the setting in so strongly, almost as though it is another character. I can almost smell sea air. Is the setting going to be important in later plot points? Or is it metaphorical? And, oh my ... Ereinion is one smooth operator.

To put it in literary terms, crap. That's what happens when you go back to old stories and try to beta them when you're tired, having altered bits of plot. Thanks for pointing that out. It's a typo in the second chapter, which I have fixed. (the 'oops' smiley isn't working for some reason.) Hopefully my stupidity won't put anyone off reading? Confused smiley face

Wed Mar 16, 2005 12:24 pm

SpaceWeavil said
> To put it in literary terms, crap. That's what happens when you go back to old stories and try to beta them when you're tired, having altered bits of plot. Thanks for pointing that out. It's a typo in the second chapter, which I have fixed. (the 'oops' smiley isn't working for some reason.) Hopefully my stupidity won't put anyone off reading? Confused smiley face

Durn it, I was gonna go back and adjust my review so future readers wouldn't even know that typo existed. Smile smiley face

I see you've smoothed that out in the story. And have promised me Ereinion (sp?!) goodness later on. I am satisfied.

Signed,
yer adoring fan

Sat Mar 19, 2005 4:41 am

Ereinion is a silvertongued devil. And oh, I *like* him. Poor Cirdan, tho!

Thu Mar 24, 2005 2:03 pm

Okay, I was rooting for Cirdan. Was I backing the wrong horse? Cirdan ain't down on the beach sucking face with Elinel. Just because he has her daddy's blessing does not mean that he has hers. Cirdan seems to be counting his chickens before they are hatched! Maybe I will root for Ereinion instead. Like my son always does with sports teams, I will just root for the winner. So far - Go Ereinion!!! Very Happy smiley face

Mon Mar 28, 2005 4:48 am

Oh man, poor Cirdan. And Gil-galad, dayum girl. I'm so not seeing the fat old f&*^er from the movies anymore. Thank you Thank you Thank you. I really would like to see Cirdan happy, but I would really really like to see some good ole Gg smut. Can she have both of them, pleeeeez? Very Happy smiley face

I love the way your writing is evoking the havens, the atmosphere is so true to what it should be. I wanna be you when I grow up!

Jesxxx

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