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SilverMoonLady

Joined: 14 Jul 2003
Reviews: 251
Location: Breaking in a Brandybuck... *wicked grin*
Thu Mar 17, 2005 11:04 pm
very nice stream of consciousness piece... And so stark, where words and actions have caused the hurt, but can barely express the world of regret that comes of it. Lovely!
 
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Sulriel

Joined: 07 Jan 2004
Reviews: 327
Location: Imladris (or maybe Texas ...)
Fri Nov 04, 2005 10:13 am
How like the artist in the family to take the pain of them all and carry it - for how long ... ? unending? He's prepared for that I think. Well done.
 
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Rous

Joined: 20 Mar 2004
Reviews: 503
Location: Trying to stay below the radar
Mon Nov 16, 2009 3:23 pm
Very nice little drabble.

I do have a couple of points, though.

...and walk a wanderer's pilgrim forever.

I really think that pilgrimage is a much better word here.

And it is all my fault. My own to blame.

This line...I am not sure why it sticks out, but it does. I know it is the second part, but I can really offer no suggestions.

Thank you for sharing.

rous
 
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