Reviews for "Envious Moon"

Tue Mar 29, 2005 10:13 pm

Am so deep in fangirlish wonder right now. First, you gave a voice to Celebrimbor. Oh, thank you. He is such a neglected character. And *what* a voice. His longing was a live thing, just short of pitiable. This is *exactly* as I've always seen him, so talented and skillful with his hands, but so raw with his heart. It's excruciating to know the events that brace this moment, to know what he endured and that, despite her disregard of him, he did give her the greatest work of his forge, the purest gift if his talent. I can't believe I'm this emotional about a smut piece, but this one was *so* ... no words.

Wed Mar 30, 2005 4:03 pm

I'm with Viv. I like what you did with Galadriel. I found myself not liking hr characterization at first. But you gave voice to what we all think must have happened between Galadriel and Celeborn.

Applause

Inglor

Thu Mar 31, 2005 12:34 am

Wow

First of all, this is by no means a PWP. There was a plot. And what a plot it was. Second of all, I agree with Viv, emotional story. I wanted Celbrimbor smut cause I think he is a tragic character and this fit exactly. I find myself very ticked off at Galadriel (stupid cow) for toying with him for her own pleasure and her own need to feel desired. Makes him even more tragic. Poor Cel. He got royally screwed by everyone. Literally in this case. This was really beautiful Space. For a one chapter story it had a huge amount of plot, characterization, angst, and smut.

Poor Celbrimbor. Crying or Very sad smiley face

Now you need to write one where he goes and has some raunchy hanky panky for no reason other than be to get him some and show Gladdy the Cow he doesn't need her pity "you know what". I mean after what Annatar does to his body, Celbrimbor deserves all the smut he can get from fan fiction writers because old JRRT just did mean things to his body and didn't even mention him getting him some at least! Evil or Very Mad smiley face

Bravo - now go write some smut for Dior. He was next on my list. You are the like the Smut Delivery Guy! I drop hints and you deliver. Where shall I send your tip?? Wink smiley face

Thu Mar 31, 2005 8:45 am

I agree with Alassante. I don't think this deserves to be called a PWP simply because you've managed to add so much background to it. Celembrimbor and Galadriel ... very unlikely couple, yet you have successfully brought this unexpected "what if?" to life.

Celembrimbor comes through as a very tortured being and his impossible longing for Galadriel makes him even more tragic. Even when he finally reaches for that he desires most is taken away from him almost immediately. The final line was perfect and it opens the door for the coming events. Yet all I could think about was the horrible end that Celembrimbor was to suffer and I wondered if Galadriel would've shed a tear or two for him.

I also commend you on the dialogue between Galadriel and Celeborn. You could feel their power and strong wills through their words. It's amazing all that you have accomplished in such a short writing piece. Congratulations Wink smiley face

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Thu Mar 31, 2005 12:57 pm

Hot Damn Gladdy, you go girl!!! I love her, Space. Just because her ruthless method to ensure the safety and welfare of her people involved her feminine wiles as opposed to weapons of mass destruction, it doesn't make her any less heroic. Who knows what went on in her head during 'the act' I'm sure whatever it was, in her way of thinking it was secondary to what is best for the elves. You go Gladiola, one point for the wimmins!!! I still think you should have done what i said with Cel, but that was purely for gratuitousness' sake (is that a word?). Cel, I love ya baby, but this was aaaallll about the Galadriel for me.

Mon Apr 04, 2005 10:23 am

wow....... Very Happy smiley face

So much history and character, so much told in such a short space... Truly amazing! Exceedingly hot, but so well framed, there is this world of emotional cause and consequence all around it.

Sat Apr 16, 2005 2:24 pm

Wow! just Wow! Where do I begin? Well maybe thanks to Al for the plot bunny! This is no PWP! It's all plot!!! I can't believe that in one chapter you sucked me in so well! You gave just enough description of all the characters to feel that they had a history and we could identify with them. The have emotions and desires that are deep and not just plot devices.
And honey! Between the forge (thanks for the strong female craftsman and warrior in one) and the passion, whooo baby, pass the ice chips!!! Excellent! A pleasure to read!!!

just have to edit this and say - Great Graphics Too!

Sun Oct 02, 2005 10:56 am

I loved that Gal was ruthless enough to seduce Celebrimbor in order to figure out what Annatar was doing. IMO that was the true reason why she had sex with him, not for the desire.

Celeborn shows through as one strong character. Man, I love all your elves!

SW, yet another piece of art. Thank You.

Thu Jan 26, 2006 7:33 pm

I love it, Spacey! All of it!

I felt sorry for Celebrimbor! He pines after Galadriel, finally!gets what he's always wanted, and then has his heart shattered when she leaves him. Crying or Very sad smiley face

And then there's Galadriel herself. She knows exactly what Cel wants from her, and uses it to get his secrets. spy!badass!Glads at work. Now I don't feel so bad in writing her the way I did. Very Happy smiley face

I'll have to agree with the others, Spacey. I don't consider this PWP at all. There is porn and there is plenty of plot. If there's a genre for tragic! I'd put it there, but Drama or Angst would also fit nicely. Very well written, and worthy of being read again and again. That's why I printed it out, you know... Wink smiley face

Sun Feb 19, 2006 10:03 am

See there you have the reason why I don't like Galadriel, using whatever means to get what she wants. And what she caused?

The thought hit him suddenly with an icy cold blast. Celeborn could have this whenever he wanted. And Celeborn would know that the woman he held afterwards loved him deeply. Celebrimbor, on the other hand, felt Galadriel slip out of his embrace and move away, tidying herself and fixing her hair back into place. Triumph faded, making way for the deepest sense of emptiness Celebrimbor had ever endured.

Just to act on his deepest longings, yeah that is something I have seen Galadriel doing again and again: a very strong characterisation Space. Ah and Celebrimbor, betrayed by a product of his mind, just like his grandsire. Where Fëanor died with fire consuming his soul, Celebrimbor is hit by the ice cold feeling Galadriel leaves him with, used for her goals alone instead that she helps him. A great story Space, a good story arch with suspense aplenty. Smile smiley face

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