Reviews for ""Alive" and "Broken""

Wed Mar 30, 2005 9:26 am

Alive - so excellent. I loved the 'butterfly kiss' sentence, and the final line was really wonderful and summed the whole relationship up admirably.

Broken - After 'Alive' I was taken completely by surprise by this. I was expecting something dark and intense, but not the humour. Fantastic. The last line is priceless and even with only a 100 word scene, I can easily visualise everything. I'm still laughing now...

Very enjoyable.

Wed Mar 30, 2005 2:27 pm

I'm so loving this drabble smut!!

Yey you for writing two such different yummy drabbles!!!

Off to find the boyfriend now.... either that or a cold shower Very Happy smiley face

Wed Mar 30, 2005 3:01 pm

Nerdanel! Classic! She isn't given much of a voice in fic, but that your interpretation is so endearing. I can so believe it. She's so uninhibited ... no wonder those two has so many kiddos.

Wed Mar 30, 2005 5:06 pm

I loved these. Good for you for posting both. Alive was very poetic and hot. Great job. And Broken--I got to the last part and about died laughing. Can you imagine some poor innocent maiden in this situation! Just great!

Wed Mar 30, 2005 10:15 pm

I am soooooo glad you got to post Broken. I love that one. It cracks me up. Very Happy smiley face

I imagine if no one told an elleth anything she might think that. Course he is all ahhhhh! to explain. But I hope he made it up to her! Wink smiley face

Oh - I forgot to review Alive. Its beautiful and poetic. Course your stuff usually is!

Thu Mar 31, 2005 12:21 pm

Oh my god, I don't know whether to laugh or cum..er cry. Holy crap girl, that was the fastest mood shift I ever had in my life. I think I broke something. Shocked smiley face

They are both so great for very different reasons and I just stumbled in here by accident, lucky lucky me.

Thu Mar 31, 2005 5:22 pm

for broken- I loved the last line. It made me laugh.

Fri Apr 01, 2005 4:12 pm

Oh, wow... from lovely lyrical heat to irrisistible irreverrence! I oooohed, aaaahed, giggled and then guffawed! That last line in "Broken" was just too much! Very Happy smiley face

Sun Apr 03, 2005 3:15 pm

Brilliant! "Alive is simply wonderful, erotic and lyrical at the same time. "Broken" is priceless and made me howl with laughter at the last line - the only thing I would change is the "F..."-word - not because I dislike it but because no elven maiden would probably use it. How about "Stars!" ?

But still Brava!

Mon Apr 04, 2005 11:26 am

Both excellent! "Alive" is a prime example of how a mere 100 words can be surprisingly moving. "Broken" is simply hilarious...though I think Cuthalion has a point about Elven swearing. The idea is great, though!

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