Reviews for "Not Wholly Unwilling"

Wed Apr 13, 2005 6:52 am

"not wholly unwilling"... it's an interesting plot idea and think you've handelled it very sensitively. It's easy to see why she might not want to resist him as you highlight how he inititally makes her feel safe before he claims her.

Very nice

Wed Apr 13, 2005 8:15 am

Temptation vs. reason, black vs. white. Nicely done! Very Happy smiley face

Wed Apr 13, 2005 10:01 am

I agree with the Mistress that you've found a great little plot niggle and teased it out very nicely. Your writing was very evocative here. The unconventional punctuation threw me off, though, particularly when you broke the batter with "ensorcelled" not being its own sentence.

Wed Apr 13, 2005 10:23 am

Hi mistressofbucklebury, RobinKa and NancyBrooke. Thanks for the reviews and I will send a PM to thank you too. Smile smiley face

But I wanted to respond to NancyBrooke's comment. The first phrase starts out with three verbs, the next with one and the last flows straight into the verb in an attempt to produce a sort of falling/stumbling/spiraling rhythm. I guess it didn't work for you Nancy. Sorry about that. But that was the intent. Confused smiley face

Wed Apr 13, 2005 2:11 pm

I liked it. I have always been interested in the one elf that came closest to breaking all the rules in LaCE so I loved this topic. And I thought the 'questionable consent' was handled well too. To me, it flowed just fine--it was poetic actually. And I especially liked this line: "enchantment swirling in the mists." Great job!

Wed Apr 13, 2005 6:36 pm

I like the way its written, I thought it was interesting. Yeah it keeps you on your toes, but that just makes it not boring. I also think it was very sleek and sexy. I am enjoying your drabbles a great deal, seems you always pick subject matter that is very intriguing and instead of just reiterating the books, you build on them and give dimension. I absolutely love that aspect.

Jesxxx

Thu Apr 14, 2005 8:05 pm

This drabble is sharp and dark, furtive but kind of sad. So like the Eol I've always imagined. Your lyrical treatment of something not-quite-violent is beautiful in that distant mustn't-touch-it way. Again: appropriate.

Fri Apr 15, 2005 5:26 pm

I find this drabble very sad. While she wasn't "wholly unwilling", she was seduced by something she did not quite understand. The writing was beautiful and flowed nicely.

Fri Apr 29, 2005 6:35 pm

I've always liked Eol, and I do like this, but I wish you would expand it and write more to go along with it. Tolkien doesn't say a whole lot in "The Silmarillion" (well, depending on your perspective of "a lot" I suppose), but I really hope you would write more about Aredhel and Eol.

Mon May 09, 2005 3:49 pm

Short, but full of erotic tension. One of the darker incidents in the Silm.

Many readers of the Silm have wondered about this "not wholly" aspect of Eol's relationship with Aredhel. The HoME does mentioned that he "took her to wife by force" i.e. raped her and thereby made her his wife. The published Silm of 1977 cleans this up a bit.

Your drabble really points out that she was very confused and not in a position of thought to refuse Eol's embraces, lost and wandering as she was.

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