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NancyBrooke
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 558
Location: In a motel 6 by the airport
Thu Jun 30, 2005 2:16 pm
I don't know Vil ... (back-handed compliment) this is the first one of your stories that sounds a little unlikely to me. I have trouble imagining he'd think of his own country this way and use the word "inferior" to describe it. It is an interesting cultural comparison, though; I just have trouble hearing proud Eomer as the speaker.

Revised: Nicely done! and much more in keeping, I think.
 

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Last edited by NancyBrooke on Sat Jul 02, 2005 7:38 pm
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Vilwarin

Joined: 01 Jun 2004
Reviews: 23
Location: Annúminas
Thu Jun 30, 2005 3:08 pm
I know, but it was a birthday wish, so... I did not like it that much either. *shrugs* It should be Rohan/Gondor and one people feels less civilized than another and then there is one person thinking about it. And then there comes Éomer and his connection with Lothíriel. I should have labeled it OOC perhaps.

Thank you. You know that you made me feel giulty? I had not liked the first version to begin with. I am now much more pleased with it.
 

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Last edited by Vilwarin on Sun Jul 03, 2005 12:44 pm
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