Reviews for "Could Will Have Its Way"

Sun Oct 09, 2005 6:41 pm

Oh Nancy, this is just tragic--I don't remember that quote about Denethor after his wife's death and the idea that you took from it--that he looked in order to see past the circles of the world to her--is the saddest thing. This brough a tear to my eyes. Well done and a great addiction for Denethor.

Mon Oct 10, 2005 3:13 am

It is just so sad and tragic, as Ellisk says above, that Denethor's grief made him wanting to cling onto stability, especially since Finduilas dead overwhelmed him. At least, for me, this shines through in what you wrote. Missing her, her being ripped away from he made grasp for a bit of certainty or control. But what could he see, he knew Finduilas went beyond the span or Arda, or maybe he did not wanted to listen to council. Would that have created the estranged relationship with Mithrandir? Very thought provoking and Bunny smiley face

creating Nancy!

Mon Oct 10, 2005 4:50 am

I had never thought that Finduilas' death might have been such a great motivation for Denethor to look into the Stone, but now I think you are right. Poor Denethor!

And great drabble. Smile smiley face

Mon Oct 10, 2005 5:03 am

A map into the deep recesses of madness. This is quite sad, that he risked the kingdom he was entrusted with for so futile a venture. I did find something that jarred me, though. In the line "Impotent was my power, futile my foresight, darkness my vision." I am not sure darkness is quite right. I see just dark as working better here. JMHO. On the surface it works either way, and it is your piece. Very good read. Thank you for sharing.

Mon Oct 10, 2005 5:55 pm

Very nicely done; indeed, what a personal, humanly weak arrogance to try to look further than is permitted us, but such a heartwrenching reason. You do this sort of thing beautifully well, my dear! I'm never disappointed! Smile smiley face

Mon Oct 10, 2005 7:09 pm

Rous said
> In the line "Impotent was my power, futile my foresight, darkness my vision" I am not sure darkness is quite right. I see just dark as working better here. JMHO.

Author's note: I used the noun rather than the adjective to say what he saw, not what it looked like, i.e. he saw darkness itself, not something dark, or nothing at all.

Fri Oct 14, 2005 12:47 pm

Somber. Moving - surprisingly so since it's coming from an unexpected quarter (Denethor).

You have an interesting concept, and it is nicely executed.

With drabbles like this, I think I learn more about these characters - in spite of the books. Yes it's individual interpretation and maybe not canon, but I think it reveals the humanity that must surely lurk inside Tolkien's mad steward.

One question: I'm curious why the line reads "I would see … that could never be seen on this earth again" instead of "...that which could never be seen on this earth again". It's probably me, but I stumble ever so slightly right after the ellipses.

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