Reviews for "The Surrender"

Fri Nov 04, 2005 7:16 am

I really enjoyed this work of fanfiction. You are very talented. It flowed so nicely together. Applause.

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Fri Oct 16, 2009 8:17 am

Oh, very nicely done! The flow is impeccable. The rhyming is not forced and it all works so well. I have only one question:

Both night and day are treasons against each other’s truth;

In this line, are night and day "treasons", or "treasonous"? If the former, then well enough. If the latter, a better phrase might be:

Both night and day wage treason against each others truth.

Over all, a very nice read and much better than some that I am forced to read on a poetry site. Very Happy smiley face

Thank you for sharing.

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