Reviews for "A Stolen Love"

Thu Nov 17, 2005 9:06 am

You certainly have an interesting premise, but I find your casual writing style a bit hard to follow. I normally wouldn't comment in this way except in a beta forum, but you requested reviews including critique in your heading, so I hope that you find this useful.

Your characterizations are intriguing, but seem inconsistent, but that may be (in part) because I'm having trouble following your transitions between POV characters and authorial intrusions. - also because I have (in my own mind) fairly firmly entrenched characterizations of canon characters that are sometimes difficult for other authors to connect with.

I am a huge fan of original characters and strong female characters, but I'm also a self-confessed uber-geek concerning canon, and while I can't critique the premise of your story (it is your story after all, and a valid and interesting plotline), I have to admit that I find it too far removed from canon to hold my interest through the chapters. Tolkien does give us the warrior Elf-women and the Shieldmaidens of Rohan and he doesn't (I don't think) exclude the possibility of female rangers, so there are plenty of possibilities but you haven't anchored the reader in any of these possibilities. I do GREATLY appreciate the fast pace of your story and the pro-active moving-forward of the plot with the action in each chapter, and I'm not suggesting you bog the earlier chapters with backstory, but oftentimes casual comments, names and other worked-in references can give the reader the grounding they need for this sort of thing.

I do think you have a lot of good work going on here and hope to see you continue. I hope you find my comments helpful in thought-provoking ways as that is the spirit in which they are provided.

Sun Nov 20, 2005 6:29 am

This is promising, and I like what I read so far. So keep up the good work okayz?

I appreciate canon, I really do, but well, who gives a damn when the plot is good? (not me!)

Wed Nov 23, 2005 4:54 pm

I think you got off to a good start and it is interesting even if I am just a reader but then almost anything with the name of Haldir interests me Keep going its good

Thu Jan 12, 2006 11:25 am

I've just stumbled across your story and i have to say im hooked. What i love about the way you write, is the fact that you always seem to leave a semi cliffhanger at the end of each chapter.

PLEASE don't stop......keep up the fast pace, theres ony so long you can deal with a cliffhanger. Im dying to find out about Ariel. Its obvious that theres more to her than surface value.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update soon.!!!

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Thu Aug 24, 2006 11:49 pm

oooo. How could you leave her in a cold, dark dungeon? Please please please please please please please update son.
Ariel is obviously a yound lady filled with secrets. I look forward to a look at her past in the next chapter

Wed Nov 29, 2006 9:00 pm

Please update I have been follwing your story for awhile and I love it!

Tue Dec 19, 2006 5:15 pm

Please update I really love your story and you left it on such a cliffe!

Sun Mar 04, 2007 8:11 pm

I'm gonna leave another review for you Please Update I am dying to know what happenned and althou I know authors love reviews and want to know what their rreaders think I think you should be writing because you have a story to tell and you certainly do! I love it ! (is that good enough?)

Sat Sep 22, 2007 2:12 pm

FASNTASTIC!!! I really enjoyed this series. Please write more.

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