Reviews for "This Be Goodbye"

Mon Dec 19, 2005 3:04 am

Well, I am not sure you can actually be disqualified. And, the requirement is 100 words; no specification on the form, so...TA DA! A drabble. This was a very nice one. I am not familiar with the work you used, but you fit the bill more than did I. I sort of cheated and I think mine is more like a crossover than what was asked for, but then, I did not mention names, so.... However, you did do what was requested, IMHO. So, YOU WIN! *collect your prize as you leave. Do not pass go, do not collect $200* Okay, it is early here (3:00) and I am not totally with it.

Thank you for sharing.

Mon Dec 19, 2005 6:33 am

Heh, like Rous I have the idea that if t is more then 100 words, but hey, everything that gets inspired by a challenge is a good one right? Sometimes your muse just wants more Very Happy smiley face

And it captures Frodo pain very well Smile smiley face

So a job well done! Thumb smiley face

Mon Dec 19, 2005 6:53 am

Such a nice response to the challenge Smile smiley face

Good job. I like it. I'm going to second Rhapsy here by saying you've portrayed Frodo very well Very Happy smiley face

Thanks for sharing.

Binka

Mon Dec 19, 2005 7:28 pm

This was a very creative and well-done response to the challenge! I'm not familiar with Larkin, but I'll give him a look-see. Smile smiley face

(And not disqualified at all! As Rous suggested, it's pretty hard to get disqualified in the drabble-challenge realm, so long as the story adheres to overall site guidelines. Plus, I enjoyed this a lot!)

Mon Dec 19, 2005 9:02 pm

It seems I picked on a rather obscure poem, so I'll put the original here. Not only will my poem make a lot more sense, but you can also see how much of it I stole, and, after reading mine, sooth your poor aching head with a clever poem with perfect rhythm and exactly 8 syllables per line. I'm so jealous!

This Be the Verse
by Philip Larkin

They fuck you up, your mum and dad.
They may not mean to, but they do.
They fill you with the faults they had
And add some extra, just for you.

But they were fucked up in their turn
By fools in old-style hats and coats,
Who half the time were soppy-stern
And half at one another's throats.

Man hands on misery to man.
It deepens like a coastal shelf.
Get out as early as you can,
And don't have any kids yourself.

p.s. I think you're taking my disqualification comment a bit to seriously. Surprised smiley face

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Tue Dec 20, 2005 3:28 am

I like it! Very funny and original. And you're right - they are way too polite. Not like those fiery First Agers.

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