Reviews for "Heralded By Storms"

Mon Mar 20, 2006 5:17 pm

Oh, what a beginning! I never thought about how Saradoc and Esmeralda met for the very first time... thanks for the blessings of fanfiction! This was very vivid, dramatic and at the same time humorous, and I'm eagerly waiting for the next chapter!

Mon Mar 20, 2006 11:17 pm

I love this! I am a huge fan of Saradoc and Esmeralda and so I am looking forward to every word of this one. For some strange reason I have always liked Merry's parents. I love the hobbit lasses in your stories because they always have such spirit. I was glad that Esmeralda wasn't cowering when Saradoc found her and even more pleased that she kept her head and killed the fox herself. Saradoc was such a gentle hobbit in this and this is a lovely beginning. More, soon, please. I am dreadfully greedy about these things. GW

Tue Mar 21, 2006 5:58 pm

This scene popped off the computer screen: I was seeing it so clearly. I like the gentle Saradoc and his animals, and the spirited but maybe slightly pampered Esmerelda. What an intriguing beginning!

Tue Mar 21, 2006 10:58 pm

Nice,

looking forward to more... Cool smiley face

Mon Mar 27, 2006 11:37 pm

“I’d mind this jewel, boy,” Otho cautioned darkly. “The glint hides a cutting edge to take the fingers from your hand.”

Loved that line. So discriptive and in a way, a tiny bit flattering if looked at properly. She is much more than she appears on the surface and can certainly take care of herself if need be. I am enjoying this very much and I was glad that you had time to post more of it. I am anxious for these two to get better aquianted and I am wondering if Paladin will be making an appearance. Anyway, loved this and will be awaiting more! Still also very fond of Saradoc's dogs. LOL

Grey_wonderer

Mon Apr 03, 2006 9:46 am

4/3/06 - Normally, it's my practice to wait until a WIP is finished before commenting, but I was so impressed in the second chapter with your expressions and similes - they are so perfectly hobbitlike, and truly reflect the natural world they live in. I also love that Saradoc is walking into a story already in progress, as it were, and discovering it bit by bit, as we are. Looking forward to more!

(I'm sure I'll be adding more here as you go)

Mon Apr 03, 2006 5:03 pm

Ever since he had come of age, Saradoc had felt rather like a prize hog on the auction block, and Hortensia happened to be the least appealing of the bidders.

*laughs with delight*

This is simply great, dear - I love the lusciousness of imagery, the rich use of language and the scenery you paint. You have such a unique style of writing, and I admire all those vivid details! Brava!

Mon Apr 03, 2006 5:19 pm

Snow white curls grown too long brushing shoulders once broad but now bent with age and self-imposed hermitage, he was like a dim reflection seen through a cracked glass, with the kernel of greatness still in his heart, but muffled by the sleeping giant of his grief. In moments like these, Esmeralda wasn’t even sure if he truly saw her, or if fantasy overlaid her face with her childhood self, or even perhaps the memory of her mother.

This is so beautiful, my friend. You're an excellent writer, and this is a marvelous tale. Sorry that I came a little late, but my time is a bit limited nowadays.

*hugs*

Mon Apr 03, 2006 11:38 pm

“I shall wish for rain every time trading takes me through Tookland if there is no easier way to see you again, Esmeralda,” he said, and the promise in the words and the sudden flash in his eyes made her heart beat faster.

“Then I fear the River may flood its banks before season’s end…” she whispered. “Yet I too will hope for rain and dream of rivers amber in the sun. Fare you well on your road, Saradoc Brandybuck.”

I wish I could write romantic lines like those. This is fantastic for so many reasons. I like your Saradoc because he seems so easy going and so very apt to have a 'Merry' child later in life who might get his head strong nature from his mother? I also found your discription of Esmeralda's father's mental state so realistic. My grandmother, who is 94 has begun to mix the past with the present and at times when she looks at us we do wonder who she sees and where she's gone. Heartbreaking and your characterization is very accurate. One minute she is making perfect sense and the next she is off again. I am hoping for lots of rain for Saradoc and Esmeralda! I love the way he defended her head strong ways to Paladin. Saradoc truly is a gentle hobbit. More please! I adore this!

GW

Tue Apr 04, 2006 10:56 pm

this is coming along very nicely, I especially enjoy the bits and hints of what's to come.

....... *smacks forehead* ... Hobbit stories.... I never used to read Hobbit stories. Smile smiley face

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