Reviews for "A Little Closer to the Edge, My Love …"

Sun Aug 06, 2006 9:20 am

I've always loved when an author takes a single moment and stretches it out into a more meaningful narrative, and this is one of the best I've read. And I forget sometimes, in the course of obsessing over Feanor and his seven deadly sins, what I badass Finwe could be, and with this you've thoroughly reminded me, as well as made me wonder just how much Miriel knows about the ultimate outcome of her love for him.

Excellent! Very Happy smiley face

Sun Aug 06, 2006 8:19 pm

*gulp* oh, please tell me this isn't done!

*checks* ah, good, it's a WIP.... you can't leave us with such UST! No, I demand that it be RESOLVED, dammit!

*vbg* oh, he is soooo gorgeous... blue-grey eyes! *sigh*

*pulls herself together* Um, yes.... lovely characterizations... I can't wait to read more of what Míriel is thinking... and whether Finwë is as HAWT a lover as I believe.... er, wait, that was supposed to be a serious comment.... oh, Becky, you've just fried my mind!

We wantsssss mooooore, preciousssss, oh, yesss we doessssss..... Twisted Evil smiley face

- Barbara

Sat Aug 12, 2006 3:14 am

Awesome! I agree with what the other reviewers said above. Thank you for such an impressive portrayal of Finwe - a true king and leader, passionate and capable of lighting both love and fear. This is a beautifully written, excellent, evocative and full of eroticism piece of prose.

Keep up the great work Very Happy smiley face

Tue Aug 29, 2006 5:07 pm

This was exquisite! I have never read a story like it before either. The emotion and the fear and turmoil are all so very real. And Finwe is so very strong and passionate and fierce and proud -- like his sons. Wow! Nicely done!

Thu Jun 26, 2008 6:00 pm

wow! such foreshadowing of what son would be like and how finwe inspired and drove others. Very interesting, indeed!

Fri Jun 27, 2008 10:14 am

Nice alliteration: "shuttle slipping swift through her fingers," and right off the bat, too. In fact, that whole first paragraph is exceptional: both good visualization and easy on the ears. Of course, the rest of the story is lovely, too. I adore growly alpha males (well, at least in fiction I do; in real life they can be a little tedious). I only wish there was more! More growly alpha males! More rowr!Also, I think I told you this before, but I'll say it again: my favorite line is "She didn't wish to be one; she wished to be two standing together." That is such the perfect response to that "being one" thing that comes up from time to time in torrid romance novels. I like a gal who won't let herself be completely subsumed in a relationship but will retain her own purposes and strength. Poor Miriel: she seems like just such a backboned gal in this story, but it's sad thinking what eventually happened to her. Hmm. Seems like there's fic fodder in between the end of this story and the end of her marriage. *whistles innocently and hopes the bunny attacks*

Fri Jun 27, 2008 11:04 am

Viv said. Poor Miriel: she seems like just such a backboned gal in this story, but it's sad thinking what eventually happened to her. Hmm. Seems like there's fic fodder in between the end of this story and the end of her marriage. *whistles innocently and hopes the bunny attacks*

Thanks viv! (and ALL!) for the reviews and the generous comments. Smile smiley face

I think there is good fodder going forward and also going back. Miriel and Finwe *before* the great journey.... *sends bunny gallumping at viv!* I don't think Feanor was an accident, I think she must have known what she was doing. Why would she do that?

Fri Jun 27, 2008 1:03 pm

A very hot Finwe you have here, Sulriel. Makes me want to go and check him out! But from the titile of the challenge I imagine it was one sad story. Anyway, the whole piece is beautifully written and full of your usual passion. LBJ

Sat Jun 28, 2008 3:17 am

Beautiful writing! Thank you a lot for the uptade. This is excellent Very Happy smiley face

Mon Jun 30, 2008 3:35 pm

I must echo all that everyone said before. - Finwe - rowr! and this story was both beautifully tragic and hauntingly foretelling. It makes me really think about Miriel as a character rather than just as 'Finwe's wife' or 'Feanor's mother'. To have caught the attention of one such as Finwe then given birth to a son like Feanor - she must be pretty fiery herself. Perhaps she knew in her heart when Feanor was born that she wasn't two standing together with Finwe as you said - she had given part of herself to Finwe and part of herself to Feanor leaving not enough of herself to go forward. Beautiful story Becky.

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