Reviews for "Daring to Dream"

Wed Dec 06, 2006 11:53 am

This is an excellent opening chapter! You've mastered the speech patterns of Calormen, which is something that would have given me a massive headache. The way you've gone about interweaving the books and your own story is brilliant. It's subtle and engaging. There is one thing I noticed, but it's pretty minor. The main character is referred to as both Karna and Tarna. I can't wait to read more!

Wed Dec 06, 2006 11:54 am

Ah! Aslan! It was a good idea to introduce him first of all the Narians about to come to Tashbaan. Karna's reaction to him is, I think, very believable. On the one hand, Aslan is a very reassuring figure, but at the same time, he is overwhelming and powerful. There was a good mixture of gratitude, awe, and fear. I think most people would feel all three emotions in front of Aslan.

Wed Dec 06, 2006 11:57 am

The introduction of Peridan was wonderfully done. The transition between Narnian and Calormene characters is sometime difficult, especially with an OC like Karna who does not think exactly like her fellow countrymen. I wonder if you've noticed, but the there is a slight problem with the title of the story. It's "Daring TO Dream" right?

Mon Feb 04, 2008 8:18 am

Excellent! Please do update soon!

Wed Feb 13, 2008 8:26 am

Really good...I hope you'll update soon. *hopes!*

Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:44 pm

oh, poor poor Karna Crying or Very sad smiley face

Fri Jan 09, 2009 9:44 am

Brilliant work! This is pure genius. Please continue.

Mairenn

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