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Rhapsody

Joined: 11 Apr 2004
Reviews: 479
Location: Maglor's Lap
Sat Nov 11, 2006 5:48 am
Awww Luthien, this scene is so beautifully crafted. Faramir who still suffers from his mother's loss brings in the butterfly into his father's study so carefully but his serene moment is shot to pieces when Boromir brings is first saltue. Unwillingly Denethor gives Faramir the impression that he's not his favoured son and the final lines are just heart breaking. Very bittersweet and wonderfully wriiten!
 
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NancyBrooke
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 558
Location: In a motel 6 by the airport
Sat Nov 11, 2006 2:29 pm
This is sweet, and a nice idea - a good portrait in so many ways, but awkwardly rendered. The antecedants -"he"- are often unclear and in the case of "Ever since the Lady Finduilas's death, his temperamental moods are all but unknown to even the most insignificant of Gondor's citizens" I think you meant the opposite - they are known to even the most insignificant, right?
 

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Last edited by NancyBrooke on Sun Nov 12, 2006 9:32 am
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