Joined: 30 Oct 2003 Reviews: 57
Location: Mirkwood
Tue Sep 30, 2003 2:21 am
Very beautiful songfic.
You did it well.
BellemaineChercoeur
Joined: 28 May 2003 Reviews: 106
Location:
Wed Oct 01, 2003 5:14 am
Lovely, sweet and beautifully character drive. Well Done!
KhazarKhum
Joined: 02 Sep 2003 Reviews: 135
Location: Quartz Hill, CA--USA
Sun Dec 19, 2004 5:15 am
The transitions from present to past & back again were the only thing I had a problem with. They need to be set off, either by italicizing or longer spaces between the segments.
Using Aragorn's cold is a good device to draw in the reader--who hasn't spent a night with that awful hunger for air?
domeair
Joined: 20 Sep 2005 Reviews: 7
Location: In Mirkwood with Legolas\"wink\"wink\"
Thu Sep 29, 2005 4:22 pm
I love it! It is a sweet story with a beutiful song. I would like to read more of your stories.