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Viv

Joined: 25 Apr 2003
Reviews: 673
Location: Texas
Sun Apr 01, 2007 4:08 pm
It's nice to see this moment revisited in fic; Speedle was the only character I really liked on CSI:Miami, and I stopped watching pretty soon after they nixed him. The peek into H's head during this scene is a nice concept. That said, you might want to take another look at the execution of this fic. There are some basic language errors (often dealing with verb tense) that make the piece hard to read. Also, just reading it aloud would reveal errors such as "his mouth search for sign of alive." I feel that this piece could be much bette, with just a little work.
 

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Last edited by Viv on Sun Apr 01, 2007 4:17 pm
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