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HollyTook

Joined: 24 Jan 2004
Reviews: 36
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Wed Jan 28, 2004 3:46 pm
This is a very very good poem! I love the images you created, they were so original, natural. Some words and analogies were a bit of a stretch, but for the most part, it was quite beautiful. Very well done, please write more!
 
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KhazarKhum

Joined: 02 Sep 2003
Reviews: 135
Location: Quartz Hill, CA--USA
Sun Feb 29, 2004 7:19 pm
It's not a bad poem--it just doesn't sound like Sam. I believe that he feels these things; I just don't see him saying them this way. You've done a masterful job of conveying the emotions. But it's not Sam's voice that I am hearing. It needs to be more rustic, less polished, for it to be authentically in Sam's voice. Smile smiley face
 
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