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Viv

Joined: 25 Apr 2003
Reviews: 673
Location: Texas
Thu Jul 03, 2008 9:59 am
This piece is so poignant and lovely, if a little brutal. Battlefield promises always choke me up! And I've told you before that I really like your characterizations of Valandil and the queen as well. Nice work, Al; but then, you spoil the reader in me with consistent goodness, so I shouldn't be surprised. Smile smiley face
 
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NancyBrooke
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 558
Location: In a motel 6 by the airport
Thu Jul 03, 2008 10:49 am
Excellent job, Alassante. You should write first person more often! Your Ohtar is drawn out of obscurity just fully enough that he seems to create the events around him instead of the other way around which had to be your writer's process given what you had to work with. And, more than that, you've just crafted an interesting and compelling story with good characters. Well done!
 
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RobinKa

Joined: 29 Mar 2005
Reviews: 1118
Location: Wherever I may roam
Thu Jul 03, 2008 11:06 am
Excellent, Al, this is excellent -- the characterizations, the way you built tension in this piece, the feelings of loss, insecurity, hope and shame blended in one beautifully drawn short story Smile smiley face A wonderful response to the challenge!
 
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elea24

Joined: 20 Aug 2007
Reviews: 12
Location: UK
Thu Jul 03, 2008 2:14 pm
That was so tragic and lovely. It made me quite misty eyed at the end. Poor Ohtar! I really feel for him and Náremiri in particular. I especially loved the scene with Isildur and Ohtar in the stables. It was very poignant and outlined their relationship beautifully.
 
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Sulriel

Joined: 07 Jan 2004
Reviews: 327
Location: Imladris (or maybe Texas ...)
Thu Jul 03, 2008 10:04 pm
Alassante, You know how much I love this story. Every story that has come through this challenge has just been extraordinary, and this one is no exception. I especially love reading the lesser known characters and Ohtar was a perfect choice for you.

I especially love his steadfast dedication to his kings and their lady.

You really brought him to life for me.
 
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LadyBluejay

Joined: 03 Feb 2005
Reviews: 126
Location: UK
Fri Jul 04, 2008 1:20 pm
A excellent insight into a character we knew nothing about. Enjoyed this very much.LBJ
 
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Radbooks

Joined: 29 Apr 2004
Reviews: 66
Location: Washington State
Fri Jul 04, 2008 8:20 pm
Wonderful story!
 
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eiranae

Joined: 21 Mar 2006
Reviews: 116
Location: Just to the left of barmy.
Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:13 pm
Wonderful story, Alassante. I loved the flashback of him as a young man. It helped to show the bond between him and the king. I think you did a great job with the first person.
 
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