Reviews for "Heart's Cord"

Thu Jul 03, 2008 11:46 pm

I've said it before, but I really like this fiction. Its a unique idea - I've never thought of making rope but I guess they couldn't run to walmart back then lol Yet you could relate to your character not being able to get his Da the right gift. Many of us suffer from that.

Fri Jul 04, 2008 3:50 am

Oooo! That had a great sense of mystery to it that was maintained throughout which i really liked. I especially like the beginning -Andwise's frustration is palpable and not necessarily something I associate with Hobbits, so that was really nice to read.

Fri Jul 04, 2008 3:58 am

Finely crafted short story and captivating from the very beginning. I really like the way in which you've conveyed Andwise's uncertainty, nervousness and fear of another failure as well as his hope of living up to the appointed task this time. I adore all the 'hobbity' details and references to his family, home and food Smile smiley face

Above all else I love the aura of mystery in this tale.

Great job! Thank you Smile smiley face

Fri Jul 04, 2008 5:33 am

This is excellent work, Sully, really first-rate. There are so many fabulous moments, I'd be pasting the whole thing in here to give examples. You did a wonderful job of creating a Hobbit character who was full, individualized, deeply *hobbitish*, but in no way childish or precious as some fan-Hobbits are portrayed. I loved his obsession with food, using rope terms like frayed to describe his feelings (giving him a specific framework of being), and his family history so lightly woven in here. Your writing never has a false step or stilty word. Plus I got a giggle over your gestures toward Goldberry considering our recent conversations about Tom and Viv's entry in this challenge.

For me a work has to be damn near perfect to get a five-star rating; I gave this five stars.

Fri Jul 04, 2008 1:34 pm

This is first class writing, Sulriel. So many little gems - loved the way you did things like made the hair on the top of his feet prickle. A good build up of tension in so simple a story.LBJ

Fri Jul 04, 2008 11:25 pm

Oh, how sweet! This made me want to cry. What a heartrending tale and so beautifully told. I love the crystal clear imagery. It pulled me into the story. You did a wonderful job on this, Sulriel.

Sun Jul 06, 2008 2:32 pm

This is so excellent. Your figurative language totally drew me into the setting and the character: "That fear settled in the pit of my gut like old milk." I didn't want the story to end, even though it ended in the perfect way. This is an exquisite piece of writing.

Sun Jul 06, 2008 5:38 pm

This was wonderfully written! I felt like I was right beside him, anxious and hopeful in his search Smile smiley face

Very well done!

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