Reviews for "Êl-galad Êl-celair"

Sat Jul 05, 2008 1:17 am

I think you did well. Very realistic interaction between a brother and sister. I am enjoying this 'breaking type 'challenge -- reading about characters of which I had no previous knowledge.LBJ

Sat Jul 05, 2008 6:54 am

I really think you achieved Eiranae, there is a real sense of the compassionate, thoughtful man that you saw Tel-Menedur to be, within this boy. You've captured the relationship between brother and sister really convincingly. It's a nice change to see a king from this young perspective, to see the events that moulded him into the king he was to become.

Wonderfully written.

Sat Jul 05, 2008 7:42 am

That was really lovely Eira! I adore sibling relationships -there can be something so special and honest about them. I really loved the line "I hate it when she does this." It really gave me the sense of how he was feeling -that awkward, squirming feeling that children get when they know something is coming that they won't like. I felt myself squirming with him!
I also can't believe you managed to do that in one sitting! The thought process behind it was really nice and it was really nice that you wrote him from the perspective of what he would eventually become and how he was influenced, not who he was during his reign.

Sat Jul 05, 2008 9:37 am

This is such an adorable, warm and insightful story, Eira Smile smiley face

I really enjoyed it, and I will echo your previous reviewers by saying that you've done a fabulous job portraying the characters here. It's such a brief, small scene and yet it says so much. Brava! Lovely ficlet and a great response to the challenge Very Happy smiley face

Thank you!

Sat Jul 05, 2008 2:13 pm

eiranae, this is really wonderful. I love the interaction and the characterization with the foreshadowing of the king he's going to become. Very well done.

Sun Jul 06, 2008 2:17 pm

This worked out really well! You explained the basis from which Tar-Meneldil grew, and it makes total sense. Plus, the scene reads very easy on the eyes. It's swift, visual, and quick with dialogue instead of overexplanation. I love reading this kind of writing! Thank you so much for the entertainment. Smile smiley face

Mon Jul 07, 2008 7:55 am

I really enjoyed this Eira. Taking a character that has little known about him and based on his future treatment of his daughter in law - you created something about his history. Very smart and the writing was fluid. Two thumbs up!

Mon Jul 07, 2008 10:07 am

I like the way so much background information is woven in here without taking away from the narrative or standing out as exposition. You create an intriguing portrait of the emerging adult here in the child, again without being at all heavy handed or obvious.

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Reviews for "Êl-galad Êl-celair"