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eiranae
Joined: 21 Mar 2006
Reviews: 116
Location: Just to the left of barmy.
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Sun Jul 06, 2008 10:54 pm
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| *fans self* Wow! Such beautiful images. I loved the way you built up the tension. My favorite part was his gift to her. So touching! You did a great job writing about these two. This is an excellent addition to the challenge. |
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| Author's replied on Mon Aug 04, 2008 9:18 pm |
My favorite part was his gift to her. So touching!<-- That's my favorite part too, actually. I don't think many people would think of a gift like that, unless they were very in tune with their Other Half. What makes it so sweet, in my mind at least, is that they're not exactly together yet. If he knows her that well now, what's going to happen after the wedding? 
Thanks so much for taking time to review. |
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Viv
Joined: 25 Apr 2003
Reviews: 673
Location: Texas
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Sun Jul 06, 2008 11:02 pm
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I love these two as young elves: Feanor so confident and insightful, and downright silly sometimes; Nerdanel as serious, thoughtful, focused. It's almost like reading a tragedy, knowing the end to which they eventually come and yet being unable to look away from the road that takes them there. I don't *want* her to become ever-grieving widow Nerdanel who bore seven sons only to have them all die tragically; and I don't *want* this Feanor to come to a vengeful end in search of his silly bling. I want them to be happy ever after, dagnabbit.
It's your fault, you know, for making them so accessible and warm. Plus the smutty goodness at the end of this installment:we likes it, precious. And we could stand to see more (both the story and the, er, intimacies). |
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| Author's replied on Mon Aug 04, 2008 9:12 pm |
Feanor so confident and insightful, and downright silly sometimes;<-- This surprised me, actually. I was expecting him to be as intense and focused as he is later in the stories, but he came through as so much lighter and, while not exactly "care free", definitely less troubled than he is later on.
I want them to be happy ever after, dagnabbit. <-- Me too, but the fun of the writing/reading will be seeing how happy they are before it all falls apart.  More coming soon, I hope.
Many thanks for your kind review, and all your help. |
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RobinKa
Joined: 29 Mar 2005
Reviews: 1118
Location: Wherever I may roam
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Mon Jul 07, 2008 5:02 am
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I'm so glad to see your story posted I was sure I would read a gripping tale. This reminds me of your "Nights in Rohan" saga, because once again you made me feel as if I knew the characters for a long time before the story began. Your ability to bring them to life with excellence always leaves me in awe and wanting to read more and more. Your Feanor is honest and straightforward; Nerdanel -- quieter and thoughtful, and passionate. And I love Mahtan here
Wonderful challenge entry and very enjoyable read, my dear Neu. I'll be watching this. Thank you very much for sharing. |
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| Author's replied on Mon Aug 04, 2008 9:14 pm |
Your ability to bring them to life with excellence always leaves me in awe and wanting to read more and more.<-- *Blush.*
Thank you very much for sharing.<-- Thank you so very much for always being encouraging and helpful. |
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Sulriel
Joined: 07 Jan 2004
Reviews: 327
Location: Imladris (or maybe Texas ...)
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Mon Jul 07, 2008 8:56 am
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*gasp*! This is wonderful. There have never been enough Nerdanel stories and this is a very welcome addition. I just adore seeing her and Feanor young but not childish. and I just melted at the last scene. *whew*! very very nice!!  |
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| Author's replied on Mon Aug 04, 2008 9:22 pm |
*gasp*! This is wonderful. <--Thanks.
I just adore seeing her and Feanor young but not childish. <-- This was a surprisingly hard line to walk. On one hand, neither of them are the people they are when he is banished, but at the same time, it's hard to tell from canon how their personalities changed. There's little enough about Nerdanel anyway! I'm relying a lot on common sense and observations from friends and my own relationships through the past decade or so, which is a little hairy.
Thanks so much for the review! |
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SilverMoonLady
Joined: 14 Jul 2003
Reviews: 251
Location: Breaking in a Brandybuck... *wicked grin*
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Mon Jul 07, 2008 10:24 am
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| Ooh, very delicious! So well done, just at the right pace... I really enjoyed this! |
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| Author's replied on Mon Aug 04, 2008 9:22 pm |
| Thanks! Might be more hot stuff to come. After all, they do get married. |
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NancyBrooke
Joined: 12 May 2003
Reviews: 558
Location: In a motel 6 by the airport
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Mon Jul 07, 2008 11:33 am
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| Phew! Excellent work, Neume. Do you know what I love best? The pacing - how everything unfolds in its own good time and every intensifying detail adds to teh richness of the story without every rushing it. |
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| Author's replied on Mon Aug 04, 2008 9:23 pm |
Thank you. I'd love to be able to say "Yep, planned it just like that" but really, even though I was supposed to be mapping things out ahead, it evolved entirely the way it wanted to yet again.
Thanks so much for the review. |
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Alquawende
Joined: 06 Jan 2008
Reviews: 4
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Wed Jul 30, 2008 6:16 pm
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I like your take on the woman we know as Nerdanel and Feanor's wife. The poor woman. To always be second because her elder sister was the fairer one in looks. Also, you have made Mahtan someone more than just the father of Nerdanel, and Feanor's teacher.
I think it kind of odd that Nerdanel's brother-in-law is a cousin of Earwen, who is of the Teleri, because Feanor and his sons later began the first Kinslaying at Alqualonde. Please continue this story. |
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| Author's replied on Mon Aug 04, 2008 9:29 pm |
I like your take on the woman we know as Nerdanel and Feanor's wife. <-- Thank you.
I think it kind of odd that Nerdanel's brother-in-law is a cousin of Earwen, who is of the Teleri, because Feanor and his sons later began the first Kinslaying at Alqualonde.<-- Please elaborate on this if you care to, keeping in mind that to the best of my knowledge, there's no reason for Mahtan's family and Earwen's family to dislike each other *yet*.
Please continue this story. <-- Several more chapters are forming in my mind, though I'm terribly weak in my Silmarillion knowledge, so they may take a while. Thank you so much for reviewing *and* for raising questions. |
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RobinKa
Joined: 29 Mar 2005
Reviews: 1118
Location: Wherever I may roam
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Tue Jun 23, 2009 3:23 pm
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| I liked the talk between the fathers, I liked Istarnie's ally, and I liked all the family dynamics in this. And who was the spirit of fire here? Nicely done, and I'll keep a lookout for the next installment. Thanks for updating! |
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