ghettoelleth
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Fri Feb 17, 2006 11:42 am
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| Uhm, wow. I am really taken aback by this, Duchess. The narrative is not what I'm used to reading from you, as I have only ever read your short stories and drabbles. I'm stunned, and quite frankly, pleased as all hell that Sil pointed this out on the MPA list or I may not have ever read it. With your typical flair for descriptives that, while quite detailed, never seem to fall short of evocatively entrancing, you paint pictures with words like no one else. You are a spinner of tales without equal, IMHO. The thing I find so fascinating about your narrative is that you give such vivid detail without ever inadvertanly wandering into, what I like to call, Steinbeck's Inferno. I never get the feeling that you've gone too far, nor do I ever feel like anything is missing. You give descriptions of things like the flowers, in intricate detail and make us see every beautiful blossom as if we were looking at a photograph, and yet we are spared the droning description of each stitch in her gown. You know where to pull the reader into the world you want to convey, and where to let the readers imagination take root. This was just a delight to read. The sex, well I'm sure you've heard it all on that note, but I would like to applaud you on this for another reason, rather than the fact that it was really really hawt, (which it was). I have read a number of stories in this ficdom in which sex between humans was depicted and it is either frustratingly ordinary, or graphically and, in my opinion, exaggeratedly earthy. You wrote this with such a beautiful sense of realism without ever going too far. It is corporeal, sensual and carnal, yet it never crosses that oh-so-fine line into the raunchy and uncouth that I simply cannot stomach. Although I am quite aware that this is a very personal thing, for me, the more metaphorical the smut, the better. In this case, however, you managed to be straightforward without ever being crass or lewd. I applaud you hugely on that score because it is such a difficult thing to achieve. There are also certain anatomical terms that are often used, I feel, simply for shock value. The second I see them in the midst of a sex scene, they usually just immediately turn me off or yank me clean out of a fic. You used several and I did not bat an eye, they so perfectly fitted in where you placed them. Just...a million kudos on this, my friend. You once again have amazed me with your amazing talent. |
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. i always hate and love stories like this. it's a work of art. 
