Reviews for "What Cannot Be Undone"

Wed Nov 12, 2003 4:57 am

Well Done! Great pacing, hertrending descriptions and beautiful character dynamics.

Wed Nov 12, 2003 3:53 pm

There is no fault in your writing; as always it is smooth, elegant, and riveting. Your characterizations also are a joy. The only thing that disturbed me here was the double standard ... why is Glorfindel's violence okay, but the twins' is not? They snapped at Lindir, but Glorfindel slapped them. I would think physical violence amongst elves would be much more abhorrent than some snide words. Also, people tend to deal with grief in various ways. Lindir shuold be congratulated for not letting his violent past hurt him now, but that doesn't mean that the twins should be just like him. Of course, my reactions to the lesson and rebuke must indicate how powerful the story was. So definitely congratulations on another well-done piece.

Fri Nov 14, 2003 7:59 pm

I think it depends on the spirit in which the violence is carried out. Glorfindel is behaving as an angry [foster] father, not as a cool, dispassionate elf with a penchant for spanking. And there is a very real possibility of the twins doing serious physical harm to Lindir or one of the other Elves of Imladris. Glorfindel is a lord, but is also a soldier, and this is the only language Elladan and Elrohir seem to understand at this point.

> Viv said
> There is no fault in your writing; as always it is smooth, elegant, and riveting. Your characterizations also are a joy. The only thing that disturbed me here was the double standard ... why is Glorfindel's violence okay, but the twins' is not? They snapped at Lindir, but Glorfindel slapped them. I would think physical violence amongst elves would be much more abhorrent than some snide words. Also, people tend to deal with grief in various ways. Lindir shuold be congratulated for not letting his violent past hurt him now, but that doesn't mean that the twins should be just like him. Of course, my reactions to the lesson and rebuke must indicate how powerful the story was. So definitely congratulations on another well-done piece.

Sun Nov 23, 2003 2:04 pm

I have read similar stories before - about the grief of the twins. I think that perhaps their grief was different from other elves because they were peredhel. Their human blood tempted them with thoughts of revenge, not a pure revenge, but one that threatened to taint thier whole lives.

I think you handled the story very well, and I enjoyed it very much.

Tue Feb 17, 2004 7:49 pm

What a touching story of both great pain and healing. Your story brought to life the level of trauma that the twins keep locked inside of them.

Sun Mar 21, 2004 1:42 am

Very well written, well expressed... Thank you Smile smiley face

Sun Mar 21, 2004 9:20 pm

It's a rare story that treats the twins' anger--usually they are merely clowns. Bravo!

Fri Jun 25, 2004 3:15 pm

I really enjoyed reading this, it's not often you get a elrohir and elladan fic at all, let alone one like this, well done! Very Happy smiley face

Sun Jun 27, 2004 3:16 am

Beautifully written! Glorfindel is one of the most noble and powerful elf lords in Middle Earth, and I love it when he shows off his more serious side. A little violence towards the Sons of Elrond was not only well deseved, but it was the only way to get through to them. Great job!

Sun Jun 27, 2004 10:14 pm

Very well written. Just add what everybody else said. I do not like the fact that most make the twins out as baffoons, yet neither do I care for the penchant to portray the Elves as unemotional cold fish. The movies made this picture too easy to accept. I believe that something catastrophic enough would move them to uncharacteristic behavior. After all, look at some of the things they did in the first age. So very unElf-like. Good subject and well handled.

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