Reviews for "First Born"

Mon Nov 17, 2003 7:17 am

Chapter 2 will be update soon?

Indeed this is a lovely fic to read, keep it coming.

Fri Nov 21, 2003 5:03 pm

Lovely story! I'll be honest, I've read the entire story on FF Net, but I've finally gotten my rear end in gear to review.

It never crossed my mind that an Elf could miscarry, but I suppose that it is possible, given the shock that Athiel must have suffered. Now that I think of it, I remember coming across a reference in Morgoth's Ring that said that babes who died early in life could be reborn to the same parents. Nevertheless, it hurts just the same as if the baby never had a chance of reincarnation. Crying or Very sad smiley face

Athiel is a refreshing change from the dozens of mealy-mouthed 'wives of Thranduil' - an Elf strong enough to be the counterpart of the Woodland King.

And you have a Good!Thranduil! Kudos! Very Happy smiley face

So touching when he chokes down Rawien's breakfast. Reminds me of the concoctions I used to make when rooting through the kitchen as a kid.

Are you writing anything else? I'd like to know!

Regards,

The Power of the Book

Fri Nov 21, 2003 6:21 pm

I will side with TPotB, up there! It was really cute the scene you put at the end of the chapter, specially since you make it completely believable that even in grief they have the heart to enjoy another youth. Very well written your approach on the emotional state of parents in that sad moment.
If your writting something else I´d also like to know, and, obviously the updates on this one.
Congratulations on a job well done! Wink smiley face

Tue Dec 02, 2003 4:17 am

Keep them coming, you wrote the chapters well.

I still love what I read.

Sivan Wink smiley face

Tue Dec 23, 2003 6:48 am

I love your story, please update soon... please.

I love what I read so far... Laughing smiley face

Sivan

Mon Jan 05, 2004 5:28 pm

This was a wonderful idea! You handle it well also. I particularly congratulate you on the characterisations! Very Happy smiley face

My only critique is that this story would be 'tidier' if it were proof read. There are very basic grammar and punctuation mistakes that i found off putting. In some paragraphs, you also mixed modern and formal speech. This made some things sound less mature than your overall story. I got the impression that you are a younger writer...

Please continue with your fiction, the concept itself is so well done that this story deserves to be finished and displayed. Well done.

Wed Jun 09, 2004 2:56 pm

I loved it! Angst for the lost baby, strife with the big bad mama Elf who saw the error of her ways and mended 'em, sweetness with Thranduil and his darling wife and then little Legolas is born. Getting to see the snippet of his childhood was very cute too. Very nice! Smile smiley face

Tue Feb 15, 2005 1:05 pm

What a lovely writing of the joy of becoming a parent. I liked seeing Thranduil as a wonderful father.

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