Reviews for "The Price of Redemption"

Wed Aug 05, 2009 10:03 am

No reviews yet...? Let me make up for that.

I think that I already told you that you've got a very promising beginning of a intriguing story here. A story that figures a young Tyelpo is a rarity. I like your portrayal of him -- he seems a very kind soul, lost in the chaotic life of the (in)famous House of Feanor, torn between the loyalty his father demands of him and the love for Lómemírë. She is a strong young woman -- and not to mention that brave enough to step between the Feanorian and his son. That's not an easy thing, Curufin won't like her -- as we can see at the end of this chapter.

And, KABOOM!!! After what I thought would be a chapter of family conflicts, you bring the fallen Vala and his eight-legged companion on to the stage, and the Light's turned out!

I hope you continue the story soon Smile smiley face

I'll be watching this.

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Reviews for "The Price of Redemption"